Why Wont She

its really a song but i figure someone will relate..

I think I'm wasting my time
Trying to win a woman's heart
that doesn't want mine
But up that hill I climb, I climb...

Maybe my smile isn't big enough
Maybe my heart just won't give enough
There's a missing piece to the puzzle
But it's so far out of touch

Tell me why won't she love me
Someone tell me why won't she trust me
No, I won't give up easily
But someone tell me why won't she love me...

I've changed my ways
I'm not that other guy my friends used to say
No woman in her right mind should date

I've learned from my past mistakes
Her love for granted, I won't take
Don't know If she fully hears me
cause she won't meet me half way

Give me a chance
A few minutes of your time
Share a fragment of that intellect
A small glimpse of that smile

Anyone truly fighting for love
would walk many miles
just for a chance...

 

Reviews

[Baby Boy]

Wow! This is powerful dawg and gI can tell that the writier has true genuine feelings by these words that are spoken! Really showing your heart and emotions in gthis write and I'm sure we would see the change if she read this or if she was told! Great job man! I'm feeling this! Do your thing! One!


-JC-

[Clarisse Nanoit]

A touching piece. Actually, I was just looking over a poemI wrote that was VERY similar to this when I stumbled upon the read request for this one. I can DEFNITELY relate to the unriqueted (sp?) love thing. I would like to hear the song.
KH

[Stacy Hessler]

This was a fantastic write. I know there are many guys out there that can relate to this...and women for that matter. Persistence is everything in achieving any goal, no matter how big or small. I really loved this one though. Keep up the creative genius. I love your work. Have a great week...
~Stacy

[Theta S. T.]

Wow, this piece really show's all kinds of emotions. Something everyone can relate to

"I've changed my ways
I'm not that other guy my friends used to say
No woman in her right mind should date "

I think these lines tell so much I think everyone has that moment when they change the "dog" ways but when that time comes it's already to late. They've already left there "mark"

"Anyone truly fighting for love
would walk many miles
just for a chance..."

I really like these lines I think it's because my mom had always told me that everyone has to fight for what they want because nothing come easy. Just for future reference I think most girls like to be chased a little so putting up a fight always helps..lol

~~Theta

[Kat Williams]

Nice write...

Tell me why won't she love me

So many shades and variations on that line...

[April Child]

Anyone truly fighting for love
would walk many miles
just for a chance...

Yes and over hot coals if need be. Love makes us crazy!
This would be a great song lyric. Keep climbing!

[Adam Greenfield]

Marquise, you have definitely written a song that I think everyone can relate to, including myself... and many times over, I might add. There's a strength in the simplicity of it and it reads extremely smooth. Great write!