It's Dark In Here

A meadow of swarming shadows whispering the cruelest of things.
Their words creep into my ear chewing their way into my head soon rotting out my heart.
The whispers all together get so loud that it sounds like a raging stampede that's already consumed me.

A swarming tornado of hurtful thoughts.
If I were to gather up confidence it would be like walking on thin ice.
Crick. Check. CRASH!

I plunge into a thousand knives, but refuse to pierce my skin.
They go for my heart instead

A dark room with window shades that never let light escape in locks me away.
They trickle up the walls behind me.
"Don't turn around, Don't turn around." I warn myself.
"Turn around and face the horror that is upon you" said the voice that I dread.
The scratchy cracks voice that comes into my dreams with poison.
The knife that comes and tears my masterpiece of harmony.

Be brave.
Or you never will escape.
Rip the shades off the windows and let the light come in!
Stand up and rip the bandages off of what once was a wound!
It's not there anymore, so it won't sting to rip it fast!
The strength that will rivet through your body as your no longer in fear!
It melts into me! Slowly, but it's still helping me stand back up.
The light refreshes my pale skin.
The skin I hid from the world.
I was scared to face them.
Hopefully not anymore.
But that's what I wish i could say I'm too weak to stand up to the creatures who don't believe what I say.

Reviews

[M. George]

Some really nice language used here... really sets the tone and shows metaphorically what the narrator is battling with. The "Crick. Check. CRASH!" line works particularly well for me. There are some very minor errors - "the cruelest if (of) things", and "master piece" should be one word.

Overall, a strong poem with a great use of figurative language. :)

[Jimmy McRoberts]

I relate to this 100% and this was worded well and the visionary language is beautiful. This is the type of writing that I love to read and see others post for people to read. It inspires, gives hope, and shows that not everyone lives a perfect life like some seem to put on. Great job.

[Wannabewriter16]

I can 100% relate to this!!! I know how you feel. If you ever need anyone to talk to you can message me. I have been through alot myself. Also can you get me a review back? Im from the review group.

[Living_Shadowz]

Thank you that means a lot and also which group I'm in a lot

[Wannabewriter16]

Read for read- review for review