That path

That Path

The dewdrops sing a chorus mean,

of silver, on beds of vivid green,

and I notice a trail.

A slug's path winding, and frail. 

I must follow this path you see,

I know it leads to a place I'd like to be.

Delicate, soft, tip-toe trudge,

not wanting to mar snail's imprinted sludge. 

For if I molest this crooked mark, 

it may disappear, gone, in this sleeping park.

Lazy sun yawns upon my face,

a drunk pull in my mind, this fog-hazed place.

Ever keeping my eyes on the way ahead,

it leads me on this path it bled.

Sleepy tinged air all around,

I try to stay awake, upright, aground.

Further and further and further it goes,

into the dark woods, this path, it glows.

Eyes mercilessly glued to the line,

if I tarry onward, all will be fine.

Cool branches beckon, sway, creak,

I'm unable to breathe, my knees, weak.

Gulping in life, I enter by the bushes,

this call to me won't leave, onward it pushes

to a sharp left and then 

an opening, a pulsing again. 

With each step I have taken,

awkward dreams begin to awaken, 

or are they memories I am not sure.

As I follow sluggish trail, on this forest floor,

no twigs seem to snap, no leaves give a rustle, 

not a move, not a sound, no normal woods bustle.

I walk for miles and miles it seems

a memory, a chance, a chase of dreams.

Fragrance of laughter, loss and despair

on this meandering, slithering path to nowhere.

Author's Note

Obviously this is not finished yet.. just wanted to put it up.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I missed your wonderful poetry and pen...This is pulsing again...:)..........................

[marlayesterday]

Well, I have been writing more often recently! And I have some things writ that I have yet to publish, I am still tweaking them. :) Thank you very much

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)..........................

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the journey you took me with in the poem. The poem had the feel of real struggle and thoughts. I like the strong description allowing the reader to feel the struggle and the sadness. I did like the realistic ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Southern Cross]

This weaves a story do continue as it was so enjoyable ..like Alice in Wonderland..Lewis Carroll would be proud

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

It's the night before All Hallows Eve (or Walpurgisnacht)! Very nice imagery and a quaint, lilting verse. Scrumptious! :o)

[Dr. Wood ?]

Hope you get to complete it...i am intrigued

[MoriartyMesa]

This had so much imagery it was like dropping a s**t load of acid at a Rolling Stones Concert!

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Your power of description is fabulous I could and did picture the path you have discovered here very vividly done I'm awaiting part two!