A promise

A promise

A promise in time, 

can turn on a dime.

This I know too well.

Heart wrenching sorrow,

that lasts through tomorrow,

not only for a spell.

Where have you gone?

My soul rests upon

this love you've given me.

But my love was too much,

too hard was my clutch,

and now you have to flee.

So you seek and you search,

from the sea to the birch, 

for a love so close to mine.

From mountain to range,

others' love was so strange,

this love you've yet to find.

Now you come crawling

to me, your eyes bawling,

to have my love once more.

But a promise in time,

can turn on a dime,

as I turn and walk out the door.

Reviews

[Pól]

Go girl!! Another great example of your versatility.

[marlayesterday]

Thank you. :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Excellent! Oh, to see the smitten kitten smiting with such soulful satisfaction. The secondary message, "That which we would love we cannot possess." The tertiary message, "No returns. All sales are final."

[MoriartyMesa]

This brought images of something out of Paris night clubs ala 1922. Scents of jazz music along with the sweet smell of Vino Emotions.



Maybe even a slap across the face and a smoke ring blown just for good measure.

[Southern Cross]

What perfect rhyme here . Most times rhyme can get sing songy and it distracts from the form..Here it certainly adds. The strength displayed in the emotional content is something we can all draw from.

[marlayesterday]

Thank you!

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Enjoyed reading this melodic poem. Loved the last verse.
You write well. ~ pat

[Rtrt]

Your killing me! Are we going through the same things? Love your pain and strength in this.

[marlayesterday]

Thank you. Much of my writing comes from past things. :) Delving into that stuff makes a great write, right?

[Rtrt]

very much so

[tekphobik]

Heh. Ain't us men stupid sometimes? I speak from experience, of course.

[marlayesterday]

Sometimes, it is the other way around. :)

[tekphobik]

Misintentioned missed intentions, if only we could all just slow down and communicate.