She waits

She waits

She waited dressed and ready,

hoping he would come, 

needy expectation,

her heart a pounding drum.

She primmed and proppered, fixed and fancied,

every hair placed just so.

When will he meet her, if he will meet her,

that she did not know.

Make ready, make ready was what her heart had said,

and rejoice it did greatly at the way that it was led. 

Ticking clock and chiming hour

passed with eternity.

Until she heard rock strike window

oh my, could it really be?

Running to the window,

Not a care for how it looked,

because upon this lovely man

her soul was firmly hooked.

She looked and longed and searched for him

in that blackest dark.

She saw neither sign nor trace of him,

not the faintest little mark.

Her eyes began to water, holding back the tears.

She would never understand it,

no, not in all her years.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Not sure any of us fully understand it .. we just bob through life .. sometimes it's good sometimes it's not .. best just to make the best of it I suppose .. these are my fave lines

Not a care for how it looked,

because upon this lovely man

her soul was firmly hooked.

[marlayesterday]

Thank you for your review. I appreciate it.

[Rtrt]

I would have to say I really enjoy the psych aspect of the rock hitting the window. It really defines the anxiety that she feels.

[marlayesterday]

Thank you. :)

[Patches I'm not so new..]

The rose is beautiful but lady beware the thorns. Thins seldom go the way we like them to that's part of the life a sorrowful disappointing part and something that poets have written about since poetry came into being.
Yore retelling underscores the job of poets which is to tell again in their own words. That which has gone before and in this you have suceeded admairily.

[lee von cleef]

The expectation , anticipation ,crafted well, tied up so so neatly

[EMF]

Hot Damn. firstly, it is exptermely well written. Secondly you tell a complex story and weave the emotions together with skill. Wonderfully handled with exceptional care, as you take the reader from one emotional state, to the other with ner a pause for breath. Perfection again.

[Steven Cash]

awww..... Sad but good

[marlayesterday]

Thank you.

[Steven Cash]

No problem

[Southern Cross]

Beautiful and so so sad. The rhyme was spot on and the emotion so heartfelt.

[marlayesterday]

Thank you.