OPEN WIDE

 

Jagged lines of avid lust, set bloody in her eyes 

Humanity is ground to dust; hate alone within her eyes

 

I tug at hair and ease my lips upon her shaking skin

A girl with abandoned trust�" with panic in her eyes

 

She fears not death for she is dead, her soul: a pile of decay

A faded smile pervert with rust: no tears fall from her eyes

 

A forceful push against the wall, her body tense and firm and tight.

A fervent heart, sure to combust�"and she begins to close her eyes

 

Those bloodshot baby-blues pierce holes into my smitten gut

I leak black blood of the unjust, no strand of mercy in her eyes

 

Her beauty had teased me all night long, I tell her---this is your fault

I whisper not to make a fuss�"a silent promise within her eyes

 

I am Sam and I have a message: Sir, please do beware

An older sister will do what she must�"OPEN WIDE will be my eyes.

Author's Note

this is a Ghazal, hence the awkward rhyme schemes and whatnot. I really appreciate the use of the refrain--it really helps to stress a point. Enjoy and please do tell me what you think <3

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

This was very different. "I am Sam" ---- Is "Sam" short for Samantha?

[Crow]

I love the ancient style, it enhances the meaning of the pain each of us experiences in life.

Well penned!

[ATG]

Not going to lie, I have no idea what this was about.

But in this it doesn't matter. It was interesting and seemed to have an odd hypnotic effect on me. That tells me you can definately write poetry very well.

[Haunzwürthe]

I've never cared much for pursuing specific forms of poetry or had any ambition to use them myself. That being said, I do have an appreciation for those that are able to mold their thoughts into those styles without compromising form or content. You've done that here and, might I add, with a nontraditional, even nonwestern style. Great piece!