thistle in the sun

thorns in the thicket of thought and
thistles of the heart's crown makes a bitter tea
which she pours thin for her porcelain dolls
with plaster-of-paris cakes 'n' cookies neatly adorned
with christmas colors daintily painted in blood and tears
the bard speaks the rueful tale with cliffhanger pauses
and excited joyous moments enclosed in the
crisp images of winter wonderland
the bard is a figure of such stories
long white beard and eyes that twinkle like stars
but now that the tale is told
the song sung.....
the bard retires his joyful face in his private room
with its smoky mirrors
and clutter of memorials to his younger days
his words once on the powdered lips of elegance
now are the dirt stained humble man's bread and butter
they were grand stories
they were adoration's to velvet goddesses....
but now they are but thorns in the thicket of thought
picturesque visions of nubile nymph's only sadden the old man
the bard packs away his joyful face
it is for the readers whom he loves
the road weary eyes linger upon her lace
she was a beautiful moment of summer in his winter life
she now a sacred image protected by
thorns in the thicket of thought

Reviews

[CWP]

Well done! I love your use of words! As I was never good at identifying what would qualify as a metaphor and stuff like that, I hope you'll bear with my review and hopefully it doesn't make my praise seem any less valuable. But, your aim is clear and I adore the relationships you create between ideas and physical specimens ("thorns in the thicket of thought...," "...once on the powdered lips of elegance | now are eh dirt stained humble man's bread and butter," etc). Towards the middle I was confused as to what you were actually trying to relay, but you swiftly tied it all up. Seriously well done!