Contrasting Worlds'

 

“I” or should I say my dearest friend

We have noted every difference…

Since our loves, charade ended.

I go to church and I count my penance…

As you my dearest tests my temperance.

 

I long for you on that tall barstool…

Next to me laughing like an infant fool.

 

I am disillusioned by our contrasting Worlds'.

I am disillusioned by my blossoming smiles fading grey…

I am disillusioned by our contrasting Worlds'.

But here in this morning, songbirds jazz…

I am disillusioned in what you didn’t say.

 

I longed for you to air brush my way…

Next to me I wanted you to connect with me

Like an oceans spray, against the quay.

Tell me every cloud esprit filled with a sun ray.

Tell me I was all that mattered each and every day.

 

But know I’m disillusioned by our contrasting Worlds'.

And all those songbirds - on my windowsill

With all their jazzy buzzing’s renditions…

Of the souls they’d shared with in the morning air.

Oh how I wish you’d unleash and take my heart to Nashville

 

Take my heart there’ like I’d been to church…

Sing in these isles to me my dearest of eternity,

And not just from another bar stool…

Even if like you, I like laughing, like an infant fool.

Just take my heart back with you to Sunday school.

Cause I am now disillusioned by our contrasting Worlds'.

I am now disillusioned by our contrasting Worlds'.

Reviews

[Diana]

Contrasting worlds are hard to deal with. It's hard to lose a friend or lover, but sometimes the contrast becomes too great for one or both parties. It's the worst when one party thinks the contrast is acceptable and the other does not... I think this piece is very relatable with its theme of contrasting worlds.

"I am disillusioned by our contrasting Worlds'. (You don't need the apostrophe here. Examples: our worlds, our rules, etc. examples with no need for that.)
But here in this morning, songbirds jazz…" Is jazz working as a noun or adjective here, if adjective it should be songbirds.'

Fourth line from the bottom: I think you left out an I. "Even if (I) like you"

Sorry to play grammar girl, but I want people to see your message, which is solid, not minor errors.

[Mark Heathcote]

I’m grateful for your thoughts Diana I write songs very quickly and often in the small hours when I’m feeling sleepy. :)