Slow Fade

it's a free verse

Your laugh,

Your voice,

Your cry,

Will never fade away.

 

Im scared I'll forget...

How much you meant to me.

 

I miss you,

With my heart, soul, and mind.

 

The pain is slowly fading,

So please don't go with it.

 

You're trying too hard,

And I can feel you slipping away.

 

 

Reviews

[Miss Evans]

The message of this poem was very nice, I have had this experience before, not wanting to let go of something or someone. You remember every aspect of it that you can, but once that pain and sorrow flees, the memories are soon to go with it.

I have a few grammar suggestions:

- The first words of the line should always be capitalized.
- In the first stanza, there should be a comma after [laugh], [voice], [cry]; and a period after [away].
- In the second stanza, I think your line should look like this-
[I'm scared I'll forget...
How much you meant to me.]
- In the third stanza, there should be a comma after [you], and a period after [mind].
- In the fourth stanza, a comma after [fading], a period after [it].
- In the last stanza, a comma after [hard], and a period after [away].

Other than those (which are really minor, I suppose, things just look neater with punctuation) technical errors, it's a really nice poem and I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work.