Slow Fade

it's a free verse

Your laugh,

Your voice,

Your cry,

Will never fade away.

 

Im scared I'll forget...

How much you meant to me.

 

I miss you,

With my heart, soul, and mind.

 

The pain is slowly fading,

So please don't go with it.

 

You're trying too hard,

And I can feel you slipping away.

 

 

Reviews

[afra]

beautiful ...^-^

[Dayran]

If you love it set it free....it appears to be suggestive of it.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

This hits the reader full on, a great piece.

[Lindsay T]

Very very beautiful! I think this is quite relatable because a lot of people, me included, go through a struggle like this with a friend or boyfriend/girlfriend. I think this is stunningly written, and my only suggestion would be to add a few more stanzas to emphasize your points. Great job though!! :)

[Btwixer]

Such a beautiful write, I enjoyed this

[Southern Cross]

This is so well expressed without all the fancy overdone words says so much with beautiful simplicity

[Dearantlers]

WOW! Beautiful. My favorite lines are,
"Your laugh,
Your voice,
Your cry,
Will never fade away."
That part is just beautiful! Loved it! And thanks so much for the read request.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww, i love just how this feels!! =( so sad... i love this poem though. Fantastic piece!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the desire and fear of losing someone. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[nevermindfan1991]

Your laugh,
Your voice,
Your cry,
Will never fade away.

 
Im scared I'll forget...
How much you meant to me(.)
*I’m
 
I miss you,
With my heart, soul, and mind.
 
The pain is slowly fading,
But please don't go with it.
(? This stanza does not make sense.)
 
Your trying to hard,
And I can feel you skipping away.

(Do you mean slipping? If not interesting word choice here . *You’re *too

Other than the grammatical errors, there is not much to say about this poem. I found it dull and unimaginative. It is strewn with cliches which makes your poem look trite. I do not mean to be derisive or cruel. Also your poem is to direct. I’m not saying it needs to be inscrutable but you have to make the reader work a little.