Here's the thing

The words you say,

The words you don't ,

They hurt.

The love you show,

And the love you don't express,

Is always tough love.

The lies,

The truth,

They're hard to tell apart.

The questions,

Are you proud, am I enough?

Sometimes still make me wonder.

Your laugh,

Your smile,

Always seem fake towards me.

I know,

Yes, I know these are little things,

But, little things can cause the greatest of pains.

Author's Note

Note very good, but give me some advice??

Reviews

[Mark]

Sometimes we give our respect away to people who don't deserve it and then we try to get it back from them.

I don't think I can adequately critique the work of one so young. I mistily remember being in high school as a time when I did not feel worthy; I never felt I measured up though others saw me as some sort of measuring stick for themselves.

I guess what I would say to the person in this poem is try to be calm. Things change so much and usually for the better as the years tick away.

[The adventurer]

You have penned down your inner thoughts ,which makes the poem its strength.

[Marissa]

thank you!

[Dr. Wood ?]

yeah..it seems to me you are being a little rigid here..it needs loosening a little I really only write in meter and rhyme but you are a free poet.....just write how you feel and try not to be restricted by verses and order

[Marissa]

Thanks! Glad you understand my free writing (:

[Katie Flores]

I think my advice would be to be flexible. No where, any where does it say that your poem has to be fixed to a certain formula, change it as much as you like to the point where you like it, if others don't get it, oh well, others will :)

[Marissa]

Thank you! Great point! I love your reviews would love t get more feedback from you on my other work to? I really appreciate it thank you so much. (:

[Aehr]

writing a poem is the best way of pouring out your emotions. And that's what you've done her. The best thing you can do is talk it out. (Might be stinky advice, but I'm only 13! lol) And the poem wasn't all that bad. It was short, and honest :)

[Marissa]

Thank you! Your advice is exactly right thanks (:

[Leslie Philibert]

Don`t listen to advice - make a poem from inside yourself and it will work, like this does !

[Marissa]

Thank you! You're right I shouldn't take advice and my poetry my poetry. thanks!

[Blue Ivory]

I like the way you've written it. Maybe the expression "can cause BIG hurt" isn't appropriate. Big isn't exactly the word we use for hurt. But overall it's a good poem.

[Marissa]

Thank You! And what would you put there?? I mean any suggestions?

[Blue Ivory]

Hmmm, how about "can cause a lot of pain." oh, even better:"could cause the greatest of pains"
You like the sound of that?

[Marissa]

yeah I do....I'll change it when I get home tonight...thanks for the advice and great help (:

[Blue Ivory]

You're welcome! ^_^

[khalid]

as a man, i think that a man is the same like a honey bee and a lady is like a flower. the bee would be smelling a flower while her eyes are looking for the next flower..i know that flowers know what bees are like so you feel it when the bee is into the next flower even if they are with them at this momene. you have expressed this in a very nicely way..

[Marissa]

Thank you! Strange way to express that, but yeah I think I get what your saying.

[khalid]

i dont think it is really strange..you are welcome

[Lina Grey]

It's very honest, and sounds like a spoken word piece to me. I think it's great. Just say it outright, don't dance around the truth. Nice job. I have no advice :P sorry hun

[Marissa]

Oh, that's great I'm glad there's no advice that means it's really actually a good poem...yay!!!! thank you! (:

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told the truth. Words can open or close doors. We must be kind and honest with the people we love. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Marissa]

thank you glad you liked it.