Come & Go

Some people come and go,

Why did you have to leave, too?

 

I fell for you,

I fell for us.

 

I look back now,

And I wish you had never come.

 

You had me wrapped around your finger,

Right where you wanted me.

 

I don't regret us,

I regret letting you go.

 

What hurts more than anything,

Is playing back the day I watched you walk away.

 

I lost you,

But you still haven't lost me.

 

I wish I could go back,

And I'd still have you to this day.

 

But now I guess it's time,

I'm not ready...

But this is Good-Bye

 

-I will Always Love you for today,tomorrow, and forever

Author's Note

Please let me know if you need help with an explination....thank you (:

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Poems of loss are always so personal for the writer. You have a courageous heart, to put your feelings 'out there". The line ..have to, too" is a bit awkward. It doesn't lend to a good flow. Maybe "Why did you have to leave, too?" "I wish you had never came" Incorrect grammar. "I wish you had never come" correct grammar.
The last stanza made me feel so sad. Trying to be brave, because you know it's time, but you hesitate, because you're not ready, then gather your strength and do what you have to do. That's very powerful! I hope you take all this as constructive criticism with the love it was written, one writer to another.

[Marissa]

No, thank you I fixed my grammar...I'm only 15 I suck in English so I appreciate it. And are you saying that you don't like my last part of this poem?

[Barbara Walker]

Oh no, just the opposite, it gave me a sense of how strong this person is, to do what they have to do, even though it is so difficult. If you are going to write, it behooves you to learn all you can about grammar and spelling (well, spell check helps us out on that). If you ever submit your writing to a contest or publication editors are sticklers for correctness.

[Marissa]

Thanks for that advice and I'm glad you like it. I don't think my poems will go any farther than this website I'm not that good, but I do appreciate your advice very much thank you!

[Barbara Walker]

Your very welcome!

[Leslie Philibert]

Good work, I like your honest, open style.

[Marissa]

thank you! (:

[Laura Maidah]

Why do you always capitalize Good-bye?

sooo pretty to read

[Marissa]

I honestly have no idea I just do...and thank you (:

[C.]

I really liked this one as well. I like a lot of your writing haha. Like Rhea said, it was a lovely portayal of emotions. I could totally relate to what you were saying. My favorite line would have to be "I fell for you, I fell for us." Mostly the "I fell for us" part. I've never heard anybody describe it that way actually

[Marissa]

Thank you! And I'm glad it's relate-able and understandable...And I'm glad you have a favorite part I am weird and defiantly like to say things people never even think of haha :)

[Aehr]

lovely portrayal of emotions! well done!!!

[Marissa]

thank you so much (:

[Legolas]

The heartbreak is very emotional. Love is complicated but if two people love each other more than anything, then they will make it work.

[Marissa]

I do agree.

[Patricia B. Hepler]

You express pain effortlessly. This was a good read-painful, yet the truth was there. You may just love them today & tomorrow yet you will meet the right one and the old pain will lessen more & more each day. You have talent~ pat

[Marissa]

aw thank you!

[Falling Leaf.]

Excellent portrayal of heartbreak. Each stanza stands alone, but work so well together. Flows nicely. Well penned. No grammar/spelling errors, at least none that caught my eye.

I was once told this message for the youth: if you let one lone person ruin your happiness, you'll always look down on your teenage years.

Live carefree, because we'll be grown up in the blink of an eye.

The best of luck,
Savannah

[Marissa]

Thank You! And I totally agree with you.

[Falling Leaf.]

It's a good moral to have...many adults tell me that they would have changed a great many things as a high schooler...I try to balance out the serious and the fun, although I'm a bit on the serious side...I may be young, but I'm an old soul, so I'm told

[Marissa]

hahaha....I have both sides but I guess as you can tell when it comes to my writing I have both serious and fun times...school is the main place where I have my crazy side but at home I'm as serious as no get out....well most the time anyway.

[Falling Leaf.]

Yup! Around friends, versus, adults or by myself, I tend to be a bit wild

[Tate Morgan]

This would be the called regret .many will face you in the years to come Seems the young ones hurt the most

[afra]

Awww this is so sweet but sad........good job ok

[Marissa]

Thank You!