FAIRY TALE LOVE

if you would be my cinderella,
i would whole heartedly be your
prince charming
i would dance with you all night
i would never let you go at mid night
i would hold you closer to my heart.
if you would be my rupanzel,i would
fall in love with your hair
and use it to fight for our love.
if you would only be my wish
i would gldaly be aladdin
so when i found the genie
i would wish for you
if you would be my sleeping beauty
i would happily be your prince
so my one kiss would rid of darkness
so my one kiss would be your
happiness
if you would just be my beauty
i would be the beast
so even though i appear like your
night mare
i would turn out to be the man of
your dreams.
if you would be my pocahontus
i would be the loving english man
here to love and make peace
i f you would only be my princess
princess of the tall castle- my heart
i would be your life time prince
i would lead you to a happy ever after
if you wold just be with me
and build a fairy tale with me
i would be the happiest of all men

Reviews

[luvs2write]

I loved this; it was so sweet! I noticed a few typos, but I'm pretty sure you'll find them if you read over it. They aren't that big of a deal. Also...( just a suggestion) you might want to capatalize the "i" 's in thte poem. So it would read like "I would be your life time prince." Instead of "i would be your life time prince." Again, not that big of a deal...just a suggestion. This is really cool. Keep writing!!

[Adam Whitworth]

like it, fairytales are what its all about :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

So many tender expressions of love, a love for all eternity... your phrasing and imagery place this piece in the category of skilfull art.

[Warren Daniel II]

I enjoyed the message which was behind the poem, and I really liked how you stuck by your theme towards the very end of the poem this was my favorite reference " if you would just be my beauty
i would be the beast
so even though i appear like your
night mare" it was just so well written, thanks for sharing your work.

[Elisa]

AWWWWW! This poem is so sweet! I would love it if some guy wrote a poem like this for me! Yeah I totally agree with the review below mine. Just a few little changes, like "wholeheartedly", "Pocahantas", "nightmare", and capitalizing all the names of the fairytale characters. Other than that, very sweet poem!

[Elisa]

Sorry I spelled it wrong it's Pocahontas. I'm watching the Disney movie right now.

[Marimartha Mardynz]

Lol. Thanks really. I'm actually glad you noticed and told me about the mistakes. Had alot of trouble while typing this.

[Saddam]

I love fairy tales.
I have made a book here on that. Fairy tales in Poetry.
Your poem is beautiful and creative dear friend.

[Marimartha Mardynz]

thanks a bunch