perrier and tap water

perhaps i knew you

perhaps

but you

threw me over this winter  in awe

your words were lovely  your heart it appeared

caring

your wit charming

your brilliance remarkable

so i asked myself 

oh where oh where

have i met you

this familiar yet new voice

i was so sick so weak

that all i could do was rejoice

no attempt then at trying 

to figure you out

you departed  like an atom 

splitting--

leaving me

in abject illness of

spirit

now with summer coming

and  you are not here

for me to water your leaves

in the summer heat

let me say 

pun or not:

may you carry a wee bit 

 in your heart

 

of "sturner stuff".

marilyn

Reviews

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A ravishing winter with someone we want badly and worthless summer when that someone isn't beside....well it's good that you questioned yourself...and I think before we do others we should question ourselves....as there maybe no signs of answers from them but an apt answer we can give us through the lessons in life....
Well expressed Marilyn☺

[marilyn 1225]

you are the fastest reviewer on wc thanks and thanks no one is perfect and yes we have to question ourselves.. basically just wanted to write now that a lot of pain has gone.. a poem for myself. it is a complex situation.. thankful for my lot in life and do have you comment on here.. have a fabulous summer.. m

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Well fabulous summer would be great! You're welcome Marilyn😊

[barleygirl]

I get the feeling this is written about a real-life situation becuz the disappointment is palpable. You are brave to show yourself to be so vulnerable. The first half of your message depicts the narrator as being pretty gullible, not very careful in choosing online endeavors, so that’s why it takes courage . . . we all hate to show ourselves making dumb choices. But here you give the rest of us comfort, becuz we have ALL made dumb choices like this. We’ve ALL felt like we’ve been played the fool . . . a few dozen times for some of us! That’s what makes your writing so relatable. You are brave enuf to write from that spot that still stings & your words have the dynamic ring of true life experience. I love your ending pun. It shows that this mishap is not going to get this spunky lady down for long! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[marilyn 1225]

OH Margie you have great eyes and soul.. you read this pefectly you leave me speechless many many thanks... recovered from the broken heart, now have to recover from a leg wound that is not healing.. lol thanks again m

[John the Baptist]

This has the sound of a wound that has not yet healed. The subject seems to have appeared to the speaker to have been the embodiment of a hope for a while, so that perhaps flaws were disregarded. This made the disappointment all the more devastating. Even so, one does not detect bitterness here, only a longing for what might have been. Though life's lessons can impart learning, that does not make them any less painful. Well done.

[marilyn 1225]

John Thanks for your great understanding and empathy,,, thanks for reading and commenting so astutely as always pain is part of life , thank goodness for my wonderful childhood thanks again , m