today

in love with the sunshine of today and hopes for all those who are not at play today but suffering what may pain and loss

inside or ouside   the sun can be loved  thru the windows to the spirit

or thru the skin to the heart

it feels so good and looks devine

sunshine   today you are mine

and everyones as well   thru the suffering let it seep into the souls and make troubles less

if possible   the sun may obey

viva la sun      for a new day

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

First off, I kinda admire the way you snatched your own thoughts off your very head to make it damn shaped with "TODAY": "Viva la sun" ... what a quest of your thoughts that expressing .. ev'n blessing the world to have peace in it. Nice ... Secondly, I love these below lines:

"it feels so good and looks devine
sunshine today you are mine..." Rhythmically manifested for sure.

"It feels so good & looks devine -
The sunshine,
Today, you're mine ...
The night, later, we be on cloud nine... "

You may continue using such pattern & I guess, it could turn into a very romantic poetry, eventually. However, I love how you wrote the poetry with cunning-ness. Very deep. You might be talking of people who lived today, but died tomorrow .. & on & on ... #ParisAttacks. Sorta tragedy .. but I believe, it's more kinda terror of terrorism than just "tragedy. Nice shot ... keep writing. You may get your bountiful butts on chair to get hooked up with anew shot under title: "Tomorrow" ... & I know, you know, what you have to write on it. Good luck, Lynn .. or whatever .. "Marilyn".

[marilyn 1225]

like your addition '' The night , later, we be on cloud nine''' to be honest it was a self poem about my happiness that morning , and also celebrating the sunshine romantically tomorrow would be a new title for sure as you say! as for you terror of terrorism in your poem Paris Attacks so very true we have that great morning to you!

[Adam Adams]

You have great morning to ME? Ah, wish you'd say, you have ev'n great NIGHT FOR me! Damn, so vulgar.. isn't it? *Joking*

Anyways... it's all your work - the words - the poetry - the stuffs that got me damn tuned in gear ... so yeah, you must start working on "TOMORROW" right now cos, as you know, being sober sucks so yeah, procrastination also damn sucks ... lol

Good luck once again and now i've got eye on "TOMORROW"!

[marilyn 1225]

will do... lol vulgarity has its place here that is yes I wish you a great night of joy security and ahh so much more.. do not want to get thrown off the board here. procrastination used to be me but changing off to my new gp doc to hear about this body but tonight or afternoon will write well about a tomorrow even in imagination keep up your great alliteration me man makes your work even greater see ya later

[Karel]

Written with a well-chosen verse and great skill..almost feel ghe sunshine while reading it!

[marilyn 1225]

sunny mornings are a time to renew thanks you for almost for you words so kind have a sunshiny time!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that sun is so evasive these days...but those who know it is there have hope that one day joy will once again penetrate the skin to the heart, and love will abide.

too much hate and violence in the world today...this is a timely and well expressed piece.

[marilyn 1225]

Hate so much of it but this is how I felt this morning with such bright sunshine hope that joy will arrive and hate end thank you , as always, for your very caring comment