stupid stones

I feel like I'm running beside a passing train 

putting forth so much energy, 

grasping at anything I can to get ahead

as if my whole life was on that train car

the faster it goes,

the faster I run 

until something simple as a stone 

trips me back to the ground 

and all I can do is look up and watch 

as it drifts away further

my heart telling me to get up

keep running, catch up to it

my brain telling me to stop trying,

it's gone now,

there is no point

maybe it is right

 

Reviews

[Green]

It can be both right and wrong at the same time, I think. In theory being persistent, trying really hard, and not giving up are all good things but applying those things to an impossible/seemingly impossible goal isn't a good application.
So often in life there are things like this. I think the phrasing and line breaks in this really work to help convey that feeling. It feels like you're chasing something and that works really well, especially at the end with the last line separated out from all the others. It very much makes you pause and linger on that thought.