Murder

I came home to horror.
The smell of death overwhelming.
The bodies laying there lifeless.
Blinding light coming through the windows.

I walked in scared.
Did I kill all of them?
Or did I leave them to die alone?
Such a waste of beauty.

How have I not learned to respect life?
I should have loved them more.
I should have followed the instructions.
Indirect light, water once a week, 78 degrees.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Not just another pretty face … there's skill and creativity in that ink of yours, emotion and imagery, too, amongst a myriad of other sensory sensations that feel good, without explanations or titles.
Not much to offer in critique, except, perhaps, to use fewer periods, more unpunctuated line breaks, and more commas to improve flow … but, whatta I know?

I love both … the way you lured me in with your title, and enthralled me with your poetic surprise!
MMmmm-HM! ⁓ Richard ; )

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Superb Twist.

very witty.

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[PhoenixDown]

Wow... I like this for a few reasons.
One of which is difficult to explain, but I digress.

Okay, so you are very clever. Very interesting. Pieces like this make the world go 'round - inspire other writers & poets. Ironically, pieces like this can bring about a lot of "life" - making up for said-murders.

Very very well done.

Phoenix

[Mari R-J]

You made my day!!

[PhoenixDown]

"The Day-Maker" - my mind could run wild with that. I am quite pleased, then. Right on!

[PhoenixDown]

I also enjoyed the huge contrast between reading the title & finishing the piece. The surprise was thrilling to say the least.

[Mari R-J]

Great!! It scares people when they read it. Believe it or not some people don't get it.

[PhoenixDown]

Weak... Sheep people.... We are no sheep people! ROAR!

[Mari R-J]

Lol, no we're not

[Bohrium Guy]

Good ending..."Indirect light, water once a week, 78 degrees" another nice chuckle... Keep writing I am enjoying your works..

~Rob~

[Mari R-J]

Thanks!! I enjoy writing them.