F**K *

holy angry 2 years ago much?

F**K YOU 
F**K HER 
F**K THE LOVE I PUT IN YOUR HEART -

 - THAT YOU'RE NOW GIVING TO HER

I TAUGHT YOU THAT S**T

THE MEANING OF IT

AND FROM THE SWEETNESS TO THE SEX
I F*****G SHOWED YOU ALL OF IT

 

it's funny how you think

that it's real, what she's giving you back in return

 

SHE'S STILL IN LOVE WITH HER EX

SHE'S CHEATED ON YOU

 

now how does that feel,

                       tell me,

 

tell me,

 

                               does it

                               [burn?]

Author's Note

i don't care that i said it a million times, or how it's formatted, it made me feel better.

Reviews

[Enigmatic Amor]

Love the rawness of this piece. The formatting does really give it a punch. Nice job using your own feelings, I could feel the pain deeply.

Take care.

[Flow]

Nothing like that little twist of revenge about her ex boyfriend. I know you don't care about format and maybe thats why your format is unique and free. this is another good one by you. I can feel the rage anger and revenge.

[Joseph - Michael]

That was a really great way to express your anger like that. You've written it harshly, but more of the smooth way. Just one thing; "burn"? I'll accept that, but I think it would've been better if you use "hurt, doesnt it?" But, hey, that's just me

Anyway, it's all still good though....

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Damn girl you vented your rage with unbridled passion and raw energy... I really like it.

[Jimi Brady]

Jesus Christ.

I didn't do it.

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

Brilliant.

[Mr. Lopez]

F*****g great! so smart and yet so young. There is plenty of time yet to develop your talent to well polished skill. So much emotion it makes you want to punch someone in the nose! Be cool and getting it out on paper is much smartet. Great write.

[Mr. Deft Diction]

It doesn't even matter how much you said it. Sometimes that's just what needs to come out, and you let it out. I like this rant....even in it, I could still hear the structure of something bigger than harsh feelings. I like your intensity and style.

Keep scribing!

[Shadow]

You shouldn't care how many times you said it if it makes you eel better and it gets the point across then shout it a million more that's what writing is for it's to get out all those little thoughts that society for the most part would rather not know about.......I am sorry someone hurt you that way emotionally charged work is always the best

[Jonathan Bodnar]

Wow, he must really be an a*s! (No offense meant) I think any guy that goes with a girl just to get it, which I really don't know anything about the situation but it sounds like thats whats going on, need to go f**k themselves...
Sorry about the strong opinions, I liked it a lot, (it shows so much without really saying anything much.)