Tree

  Silently rooted,

  in darkness towers
  this majestically-old

  insomniac's vision.

  History-etched bark;

  its old trunk

  yet bolstering

  youthful leaves,
  rustling to rhythms

  of a midnight's breeze.

  With ancient base

  still replenishing its canopy,

  sprawling branches

  framed by night,
  visions of life

  outlasting …

  my own.

Author's Note

An updated version, thanks to Richard for his kind help and guidance!

Reviews

[iand63]

Again excellent observations well done Marcus

[marcus]

thank you sir

[iand63]

sir? oh my lol

[marcus]

don't worry, I use the term loosely, but seriously, if you like my poems, then I deem you worthy of knighthood!

[iand63]

This is getting better by the minute, Sir Ian ....... erm maybe not; sounds like a knight from month python and the holy grail :S . Yes I do enjoy your work you have keen eye and a mature style of expression.

[Clara]

This is a lovely write Marcus, and fantastic imagery used here.

I liked the juxtaposition of the "old trunk" against the "youthful leaves" and the rustling of them. You've captured the majesty of life in this piece. :)

[Marcus Sergiu David]

An amazing choice of words, and a very nice description of such a simple thing as a tree. Love how the words come together in such a nice painting.

[Richard🖌]

I very much enjoyed this piece, Marcus, with its mystery and powerfully expressed visuals in this tree's life, its characteristics, and the poetry in its parts and how it interacts with Nature and human alike.
Quite creative, My Friend, very enjoyable to read, and I can tell it will recur in my thought and feeling after I have left
Coincidentally, there is a poem of mine on here titled "The TREE" you might enjoy:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1550785/
Techy stuff: Free Verse poetry is among my favorite forms, and contrary to popular belief, this form is not free of structure … at the heart of every excellently rendered Free Verse poem are its properly positioned line-breaks, proper capitalization, punctuation, word choices — their arrangements, and skillful poetic voice, for maximum effect.
If you are interested, we can pursue this further by instructive messaging.

Whatever, this is a truly expressive and interesting piece, Marcus, I am sure many have enjoyed, including me! 〜 Richard

[marcus]

Thanks Richard! I am having trouble in some of my pieces deciding what kind of punctuation/capitalization, or lack thereof, to use.

[Richard🖌]

We can address these aspects by message, Marcus, and the rest, as-well, if you're interested.

[Richard🖌]

I wonder, Marcus, have you any in-depth thoughts of my review?

[marcus]

I'm very happy that my poem made such an impression on you! It's nice to get such an in depth two part review.

[Richard🖌]

Marcus, it was my pleasure. : )

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Pretty cleaver to write so darn much about something as simple as a tree. I don't know how people write about something like a tree, a cloud, the water. I personally probably couldn't do that. So thats pretty impressive.
smart write :)

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

it reminded me of the spooky tree in every disney movie, swaying to an ooh ooh breeze. where did you see this tree, in your mind or in life?

[marcus]

In my Mum's back yard, at 2 in the morning!

[marcus]

it's a little spooky, 'cause its kinda like a forest there!

[Bo Lanier]

i liked it! nicely written. i liked the theme of your poem.

[marcus]

thank you!

[An owl on the moon]

In this ancient silence so much beauty and wonder are conveyed... there is metaphor and magic here.

[Vishuddha]

This is lovely. I live in a forest and I think this captures the midnight forest feeling of the long lived, towering woods very well.

[marcus]

thank you!

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome descriptions Marcus. It's amazing how something as simple as a tree can have so much personality and spark so much emotion. Great work!

[marcus]

thanks Aaron!