Bittersweet

Song Lyrics

 

 

Oh...Oh...Oh...Lah… lah...lah…lah.

The pouring rain, the strong wind rushing cold into my skin

A lonely heart looking through the window, precious moment when I am with you

So look at me, look at me, while you saying you love me, is it me inside your heart?

Oh please, Oh Baby Baby... Oh Baby tell me honestly

 

Here I am, here I am brushing aside the pain I am getting through, as I walks into square room

Things sync into my mind, creating dark bittersweet of big boom

So I am looking at, looking at the wall we used to bend our desires,

But right now, right now, all I have got are traces of faded fires

 

Run…Run…Run…while I was freezing in the winter pain

Run…Run…Run...While this heart of mine keep on dreaming

Run..Run…Run…Running excited in the pouring rain

Run…Run…Run…Running breathlessly to catch the last train

 

Don’t ask me; don’t tell me, really don’t think about of me

I am over now; all I have is a bittersweet memory.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[B-poet]

This is an emotional intriguing write. Being heartbroken isn't the best feeling in the world. Yet that pain will lead to a new & more fulfiling relationship if you can withstand the short hurtful storm of a
break-up. Great work Marc. A compelling read. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bpoet :)

[Mike Emil]

looks like a song
sounds like a song
must be a song
where's my morning saki?
HAI!!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mike

[Leslie Philibert]

the repeats in the third verse give,as Jack wisely notes, this the charcter of a song. A good poem that I like, a bit spoiled for me with the ugly pls. ( why not please ?, a fine word, ask James Brown !) ; a nice write from a poet I know.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Leslie

[minisla]

The second last line "really don’t think about of me" maybe could do without about or of but nicely put together.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mini

[B-poet]

This is an emotional intriguing write. Being heartbroken isn't the best feeling in the world. Yet that pain will lead to a new & more fulfiling relationship if you can withstand the short hurtful storm of a
break-up. Great work Marc. A compelling read. :)

[Brittney]

I definitely connected with the rhythm of this poem. I could almost hear the music while reading it. Well done :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brittney

[Sami Khalil]

I do echo what Jack said. A splendid song indeed...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

A lonely heart looking through the window, precious moment when I am with you...

Very nice! I could certainly hear this as a song, curious about the melody...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ms. Rita

[Jack...]

Marc, as I read this I thought, this must be a song. So I developed a melody in my head to sing along with the words. Very nicely done, I would love to hear your rendition. Nothing sucks if you can hear it in your head and feel it in your soul. It is hard to critque song lyrics without knowing the melody, but to me this looks great.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Jack, I will post the song in my profile as soon as it was done. Thanks again.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am working for one pop song and this is the lyrics I wrote, can anybody suggest if I have errors? and Pls. tell me honestly if it sucks! I appreciate the truth. :) lol