Butterfly

My love is everywhere.

I am beautiful in everyone’s eyes

My colors and tender wings flap in a magical paradise

Every flower in the field, lilies in the river calling my name

Desires of connecting my spirit in the nectar of dream

I have touched every flower, leaving great memories

Each moment has passed reaching the desired happiness

I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon

Wishing to stop in a place where my soul will find the reason

I am tired flying here and there, but I kept pushing my inevitable bend

Someday my wings will stop and my life will end

I want to remember one thing, those flowers are worth remembering

precious gems that embedded in my soul forever, the moment I am dying

I close my eyes, I am a butterfly.

 

Reviews

[Author Unknown]

This is incredible Marc. I like the symbiotic relationship you portrayed between your muse and the flowers.
If you're open for suggestion and improvement. Your last ending line is very critical.From your readers point of view there's no need to repeat or reemphasize the subject.
" The moment I'm dying, I close my eyes , as I whisper their names. ?."

The train of thoughts up to the last word line and period continues. Your butterfly still remember each and every flower he visited even until he took his last breath... Its sounds and ends better from your audience point of view.

[Lexi Richard]

This flows beautifully. I really enjoyed this, I love how you depicted a life, and thoughts, and feelings through such a small, delicate creature.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Lexi I appreciate your review :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

butterflies are so beautiful, but beauty eventually dies...

and there is hope that our lives had substance beyond that and that our wings left their mark.

this is beautifully written.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Jacob :) I appreciate your time.

[Extant]

Simply beautiful poetry. I love the journey the words lead us through. My favourite line, "I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon". I'm glad my friend sent me this as read request, definitely worth reading.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Haunt :)

[Jo Todd]

Such a beautiful reminder that life is fleeting and we need to stop and really appreciate it sometimes. A lovely poem and well written.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks JT :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Marc, the line, "I have touched every flower, leaving great memories" was just superb. It acutely reflected the individual whom flies vividly, caressing each they meet with fondness and inspiration, as the butterfly has with you! One thing about the butterfly is that like us, it grows, as does it move from place to place, organism to organism, without a particular home. It is their nature, as much as ours. The difference being our colours do not appears to those we pass unless we wish them to, and it can be difficult to know which flower to settle on and reveal ourselves to, for fear that the next may be deadly. Overall, this is a lovely poem. It speaks for itself, something that is often underrated by the popularity of post-modernism, so attracted to underlying thoughts that the true motif is ignored. The only qualm I have with this is the third line, as I felt it slightly stayed from the flow of the rest of this piece. Anyway good job and keep it up! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Willow I appreciate your words :)

[TL Boehm]

This is beautiful and a bit sad. Well penned .

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks TL :)

[Tai Ryens]

Envisioning yourself has a butterfly tends to be favorable, at least to me. I like this

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tai

[john alan willox]

nice work marc - soft and beautiful - just like the butterfly.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks John :) appreciate your words.

[Writer #00]

those flowers is worth to remember-->those flowers ARE worth remembering? (Just a suggestion)

Lovely poem, Marc, with imagery that rivals the beauty of a butterfly itself. The meaning behind this poem is very insightful, addressing both the beauties that lie in life and the inevitability of death. It seems to be advocative of living in the present of a moment while being conscious of what cannot be changed in the future. Again, fantastic.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Writer I made the correction thanks for the suggestions.

[Writer #00]

No problem : )

[writingislifex3]

this is such a fantastic poem and i love your writings(:

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks writingislifex3 :) I value your words.