Butterfly

My love is everywhere.

I am beautiful in everyone’s eyes

My colors and tender wings flap in a magical paradise

Every flower in the field, lilies in the river calling my name

Desires of connecting my spirit in the nectar of dream

I have touched every flower, leaving great memories

Each moment has passed reaching the desired happiness

I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon

Wishing to stop in a place where my soul will find the reason

I am tired flying here and there, but I kept pushing my inevitable bend

Someday my wings will stop and my life will end

I want to remember one thing, those flowers are worth remembering

precious gems that embedded in my soul forever, the moment I am dying

I close my eyes, I am a butterfly.

 

Reviews

[Author Unknown]

This is incredible Marc. I like the symbiotic relationship you portrayed between your muse and the flowers.
If you're open for suggestion and improvement. Your last ending line is very critical.From your readers point of view there's no need to repeat or reemphasize the subject.
" The moment I'm dying, I close my eyes , as I whisper their names. ?."

The train of thoughts up to the last word line and period continues. Your butterfly still remember each and every flower he visited even until he took his last breath... Its sounds and ends better from your audience point of view.

[icelandicblue]

There is such beauty in this poem. You use the metaphor of the butterfly with great skill. I loved the sentiments in this line:

I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon

You speak of the journey and the search that is universal but you do it through the beauty of the butterfly and that is what makes this poem a joy to read.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

The understanding of just being in the moment and living without thought or care expressed beautifully. Thank you for sharing this splendid read and write.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bro. :)

[Frieda P]

What a lovely metamorphosis on your page...butterflies, you knew I would love this one!

Desires of connecting my spirit in the nectar of dream

Splendid line, live in the moment, buttefly, this one floats on your page Marc, good to read you again my friend. :-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie :) I missed u :) lol

[Frieda P]

Seems we've both been MIA, missed you too & always my pleasure Marc. :-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yea :) Thanks again I will be around, I am just busy right now for directing music video and photography :) but if I am in the office I always tried to connect here. Take care my friend :)

[Frieda P]

Nice! Catching up on RR's but will revisit you very soon my friend. :-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sure :) I will be in the loop.

[Mike Emil]

good writ
but it begs me to go to the dentist now
ARRGH!!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

THanks Mike :) lol what happen to your teeth?

[V]

Positive and cheerful imagery. Nice rythm to follow.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mimi :)

[Pax]

ahh Marc, you've done it again.... A feel good poem that speaks not only to the butterfly but to every soul who flies...

Very beautiful piece!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Pax :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is beautiful, Marc! I love the metaphor of the butterfly, the changing nature of them, the desire to change of the protagonist. Love your imagery and the flow of this piece. Well done, Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Lori :)

[minisla]

Nice connection between both. really enjoyed this top marks.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Minisla :)

[gombeggar]

very good imagery and emote here...I can dig this much

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Gom my biggest critics :) thanks again for the review.