Mystic Spells

Sitting here, waiting for you to come out into the light

I am not sure if these things will work out right

 

My heart beats faster than a subway train

I am here asking for your love in this  pouring rain

 

You’re beautiful in my eyes and your love is strong

 

Please hold me tight as we dance in this lovely song

 

Now hear the beat of my heart, catch the rhythmic beat of my desire

Now feel the love I have inside, succumb to my burning fire

 

Are you ready? Kiss me, taste my sweet divine

Drink my liquid like an Italian red wine

 

Unite your strength into my mine for this love will never ends

Give me your love as I give you mine, our love that flawlessly blends

 

Look, look at me, visualize my majestic likeness

Follow; follow me into the trance of my wishes

 

Open your eyes, closely look at my face

Hold me tight, as we fly into this endless space

 

In my dream we were lock in a dissimilar translation

Forever you will be tied up in my future revelation

 

I muttered the mystical spells, our universe accelerates

Our future will be fulfilling, our love  will resonate

 

Spellbound.

 

 

(c) Marc Marlon Villaflor All rights reserved

Author's Note

My concept love story in a new level of defining love through spells.

Reviews

[jkhatz]

The only change I can see to make is in the word, "tights," just remove the "s" at the end and you're golden.

The poem is beautiful, Marc, absolutely gorgeous. Your metaphors are brilliantly illustrated and you draw an exacting picture of a magical love. I need some of that potion! :D

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol thanks hun, :) I am happy reading your honest reads. Thank you.

[ms. barrie]

oh wow, Marc, this is so "spell-bindingly" beautiful, such exquisite imagery of
a faerie tale romance you have portrayed in this poem.

Wonderful use of fluidity and pleasing rhyme, rolling off the tongue
as one reads this.

This is simply a gorgeous gem of a poem...(actually swooned a bit, eh.)

[Eddie Phillips]

Great job with this one Marc. I enjoyed it

[redflutterby]

Beautiful spell of love depicted with emotion and deep meaning. Wonderful write.

[Dakshta]

That was just amazing, I loved this write :)

[Writer #00]

Please hold me tights--> tight
Unite your strength into my mine--> mind?
In my dream we were lock in a dissimilar translation--> locked

These were the only changes I could see that you might want to consider making; conceptually, though, this is great...but I think I'll have to re-read it a few more times to truly understand it...

[Peter H]

great poem and excellent rhythm. i loved it not much else i can say

[Tate Morgan]

Its hard to beat a man in love He stands resolute to the morning dawn and yells to the fates"Is the best you got?"

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) might be, thanks for the reads Tate :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

gave this another read..such passion...

and i identify with the subway train line...rode it so many times as a kid....

and there is that heartbeat kind of sound and feel...to it...yes.

[Pete Langley]

This has a certain mystique, Marc....but you need to think more about your tenses, mate. The problem with bad grammar is that it detracts from the beauty of the piece in poetry...especially in verse. P.