The Cries of URUK

The Brides plea.

 

 

The Cries of Uruk

Dust, dust that almost covered the entire kingdom of Uruk

People, people plea for the Gods to end the painful stroke

The King, the king savors virgin blood with his lord’s rights

New brides, new brides that suffer the pain of King’s lusty nights

Young man, young man agonizing over the King’s mighty games

Death, death and wounds that brought the kingdom more flames

Oh hear us, oh hear us, Oh Gods hear our cries.

Let the King realize our tears, our souls, and our wounds

Let the King stop this retribution and hide us from the endless hounds

Our dreams were shattered,

Our bodies relentlessly battered,

Oh hear us, Oh hear us, Oh Gods hear our cries.

4/28/2013 Marc Marlon Villaflor

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

URUK is an ancient Kingdom (Now a modern day Iraq) ruled by King Gilgamesh a dime-god.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A rallying poem that charges off the page in its mystique and telling of the tale of this ancient city.

A couple of small suggestions:

New brides, new brides that suffer the pain of the King’s lusty nights
Young man, young man agonizing over the King’s mighty games
Let the King realize our tears, our souls and our wounds
Our dream was shattered,
or our dreams were shattered.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow, lol I oversight those "s" thanks Mr. John you are always here to support me. Thank you. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are welcome Marc, another enjoyable poem you have given us.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again Mr. John :)

[Jorj Jie]

Beautifully crafted Marc! :) And the song is amazing too :). Almost like watching a good film! =) Keep it up!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Jorj :)

[TL Boehm]

Nicely done. I am always intrigued by something "different" - by folklore, by history and mythology.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks TLB :)

[Jack...]

Deep, this poem falls deep in my mind. The mere thought of this nightmare is un-nerving. Very good Marc

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jack :) I appreciate your kind words.

[Mike Emil]

what the hell is this tolkien stuff doing here with ancient gilgamesh?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes Mike :)

[Mike Emil]

enkidu?
where is the hairy man?
where is the grog to drink?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Soon Mike :)

[Rhianne Ney]

God is there, He will always hear our cries (:

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Rhianne :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Welcomezz, kababayan

[icelandicblue]

Violence usually breeds violence. Your poem is very dark and uncomfortable to read- and it should be given the subject matter. It's a dusty kingdom of nightmares.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Appreciate your feedback. Thanks for the reads.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

The dark tone is intentional but if you read it brightly, behind the struggles the faith still there asking for the light. So it is a balance poem. :)

[Talal Hussain]

Marc you are a wonderful writer and this writing here again proves that...The concept behind this composition is very intense and something to look upon...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Talal but I am an amateur sometimes the tenses kills me lol :) anyway I am trying to perfect my work, in 2 months I already improved a little. I appreciate your kind words Bro. :)

[sedatezoe]

this piece has a great representation and retelling ability of what happened about its subject..the words are simple but with entertainment on every part of the piece thus the actions are vividly expressed.But i was just little bit confused of what you really mean in this poem considering the word uruk..i think you overlooked some important points on incorporating uruk to your poem.basically your poem implies the barbaric rulings during ancient times,right?and uruk has a connection with your poem with that.but as what i have said,you overlooked the use of "uruk" on your poem. what happened to uruk has been a mere representation of happenings during ancient times. i am still trying to have a research about your poem.initially, i think this would be enough.nice piece anyway.:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This only a short glimpse in what happened on every newly wed brides who sexually abused by Gilgamesh a dime-god king of Uruk which is now the modern day Iraq. I have some follow-up later with the Journey of Gilgamesh. I will post it later.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for your time reading this piece.

[Dhaye]

Nice rhythm. With or without the use of Anaphora, I like this poem...especially the concept. Being a woman, I admire you for having that sympathy on those women who are victimized by "men in authorities".
Thanks for sharing this, Marc. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Dhaye I always have a great sympathy for those abused. thanks for the reads.

[Dhaye]

You're welcome, Marc. :)