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The Great War accelerates the serpent’s falls

Causing destructions of all empires walls

The serpent incites war and the majestic invasion.

The snakes pierce the bastion of aeon

The desert eagles unified with the serpents

Infusing blood along the whole continents

The eagles build the realm of greatness

Protecting the trade and exploiting the wilderness

The crescent moon watching the eagle’s kingdom to fall

The twin merchant brothers has collapse before autumn’s roll

The clusters of eastern stars granted the downfall

The eagle fought back with no reflection

Destroyed the pillar of stars and brought retribution

Queen Sheba's firstborn killed and his soul derelict in the ocean

His heroism celebrated by most of the crescent man.

The eastern cosmos  have thousands, thousands of newly born stars.

But the eagles in the west have never been defeated as his kingdom is advancing to mars.

The defiance of the East and the authority of the West will cycle the thirst of blood

Behold the power of the new born dragon echoes in his lunatic clad

The eagles change his direction to the Pacific cluster of stars.

He kept an eye to the dragon's proxy as he might goad for a war.

The eagles might be strong, but the stars, the moon, the dragon is imminent threat

The eagles still fly, watching, he might fall, but he will not retreat.

 

Reviews

[Aramey]

The dragon- North Korea? I do think the symbolism here was excellent. I'm working on one about "the eagle" myself. In fact I'm concerned that if the Eagle doesn't learn to fly in a flock the scattered stars will win under his majestic watch, against the odds. As far as this however, I loved it and it made a lot of sense. Great write!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Aramey thanks for the reads, as I emailed you the details of the dragon, pls. don't hesitate to ask more if you need to discover the symbols of this piece.

[Mike Emil]

sounds like a drunken mingle of the aztecs and tolkien
i approve
cheers!!! drink up you b******s!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol thanks Mike :)

[Ency Bearis]

Hmm - interesting and thought provoking narrative poem, an epic mythological verses of content. Great work.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Ency :)

[Ency Bearis]

You're welcome as always

[Ken Simm.]

Thickly clustered Omens. The coming of Armageddon. Excellent stuff Marc. Intriguing use of symbols. Sounds like something from Ovid.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Ken :) I will look for Ovid since I never heard about him. Thanks a lot.

[Frieda P]

I have to read this one a few times to get the full effect. Lots of imagery in this one that spins my head, killer last line, to wrap it all up. Always an intriguing read for you my friend.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure :-)

[Jack...]

Good vs evil. I tattered tale of conflict and hope. Very nice my friend.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir. Jack :)

[Veronica Chandler]

Very interesting and skillful use of symbolism to illustrate your piece. A picture is captured in these verses and speaks to the struggles of the nations from which the symbols are drawn. I think the majority of individuals regardless of allegiances want something more for humanity than the struggles between the eagles and serpents. But that is just from the perspective one lone peaceful poetess. You have really eloquently penned this write.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ronie for the wonderful insights.

[Veronica Chandler]

My pleasure Marc...

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

This reads like something from Nostradamus.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) Thanks for the reads.

[Riley Bray]

Again, I think you do better with simpler writing, although I respect that you're trying to branch out a little bit. The point of view wasn't as much of an issue with this poem, however it sounds a little strange in places. Please read it over yourself and if the flow is disrupted that's probably something you need to check out. ;)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

There is no strange here Riley, if you are well verse in signs and symbols you will get it :) thanks for the reads. I appreciate your thoughts.

[Riley Bray]

Mhm for sure. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Your descriptive nature gives rise to your elegant lashing of the english word, well done, good read.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Thomas :)

[gombeggar]

The desert eagles pledge his alliance to the serpents...pledge 'their' alliance?

Queen Sheba firstborn...'Sheba's firstborn' ?

But the eagle in the west never been defeated as his kingdom is advancing to mars...west 'has' never been defeated ?

there are a lot of issues n character u need to resolve but terrific visual ideas can be drawn from your work...give it a re-write

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for the honest review Gom, I really appreciate it.

[gombeggar]

just trying to help...if u send me request i will be yer editor

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again :)