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The Great War accelerates the serpent’s falls

Causing destructions of all empires walls

The serpent incites war and the majestic invasion.

The snakes pierce the bastion of aeon

The desert eagles unified with the serpents

Infusing blood along the whole continents

The eagles build the realm of greatness

Protecting the trade and exploiting the wilderness

The crescent moon watching the eagle’s kingdom to fall

The twin merchant brothers has collapse before autumn’s roll

The clusters of eastern stars granted the downfall

The eagle fought back with no reflection

Destroyed the pillar of stars and brought retribution

Queen Sheba's firstborn killed and his soul derelict in the ocean

His heroism celebrated by most of the crescent man.

The eastern cosmos  have thousands, thousands of newly born stars.

But the eagles in the west have never been defeated as his kingdom is advancing to mars.

The defiance of the East and the authority of the West will cycle the thirst of blood

Behold the power of the new born dragon echoes in his lunatic clad

The eagles change his direction to the Pacific cluster of stars.

He kept an eye to the dragon's proxy as he might goad for a war.

The eagles might be strong, but the stars, the moon, the dragon is imminent threat

The eagles still fly, watching, he might fall, but he will not retreat.

 

Reviews

[Aramey]

The dragon- North Korea? I do think the symbolism here was excellent. I'm working on one about "the eagle" myself. In fact I'm concerned that if the Eagle doesn't learn to fly in a flock the scattered stars will win under his majestic watch, against the odds. As far as this however, I loved it and it made a lot of sense. Great write!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Aramey thanks for the reads, as I emailed you the details of the dragon, pls. don't hesitate to ask more if you need to discover the symbols of this piece.

[Lexi Richard]

Loved this, it's very riveting

[Dakshta]

The way you played with the words and the story, really nice. Very nice and interesting write :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

I like the symbolism of this - very strong, but I think the rhyming scheme really detracts from the story. I think this is one where you would benefit using free verse.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Lori

[Rhianne Ney]

You're right about this and great description. The imagery is well managed and therefore nicely written with everything that you held in place. It's like releasing all the bottled feelings that you're gripping inside. Great write, Kabayan~!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Kabayan :)

[Rhianne Ney]

(; you are welcome

[Belle]

I did enjoy my read, but to further understand the piece I need to connect myself to some words/phrases and names. The poem requires me to I think use different approache of reading like connecting the poem to history. Good write, Kabayan!

[Belle]

BTW, kudos to the symbolism you have used in here.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Belle :) I appreciate your kind words.

[Androglossia]

I sensed imperialism here. Not sure though but I got the feeling. Very well thought out.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes it is Maryanne, thank you for your time reading this piece.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I see a larger metaphor at work here, as well as a wonderful story within poem form. I like the idea of this one, and the way that you used imagery and imagination to bring it to life. The last stanza and line are very strong. A few places casused me to stutter a bit in the reading, perhaps a quick edit for unnecessary words just to make the tempo a little stronger, but other than that, nicely done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks GF :) thanks for stopping by and give this insightful words.

[Mother Maggie]

This is an amazing piece. Thank you for sharing your vision.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Maggie :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"The defiance of the East and the authority of the West will cycle the thirst of blood
Behold the power of the new born dragon echoes in his lunatic clad "
A powerful poem. I had to read a few time for the strength of the statements. The above line is amazing. It rings truth in our world today. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you Sir :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

eagles still fly, they won't retreat...and countries refuse to back down...their flags fly strong and bold as the eagle does...and in the end...the war's start...as one won't back down from another.

two bad the wars couldn't just happen in the sky...and we could just have metaphoric wars instead of literal ones.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you Mr. Jacob :)