Zeus and His Lover a Trojan Prince?

Why Zeus rape the Trojan Prince?

 

 

Stunned to his likeness
He tore his shallow clear skin
Surrendered his regal lair
Eagle lifted him to Mt. Olympus
to be beloved by Zeus

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Don't think rape was involved Marc. The Greeks thought it acceptable for a man to have an erotic relationship with a youth. At worst he kidnapped the boy but then gave him immortality and paid his father in horses.

Stunned to his likeness
He tore his shallow clear skin
Surrendered his regal lair
Eagle lifted him to Mt. Olympus
to be beloved by Zeus

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. John the one you gave is my original write, and it has 8 syllables. That's why i kept it 7 to become Tanka.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I might be miscounting but I got the count as 5-6-7-10-6 so assumed you were doing your own thing lol!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) lol I will check it again.

[JR Darewood]

while transforming into an eagle and kidnapping a kid might be acceptable in certain circles, (and i'll admit immortality is a great consolation prize), it still didn't sound consensual.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks J for reading.

[JR Darewood]

I love greek mythology and history, but you were right, Zeus was a rapist. He raped like half of Greece. Dude needed to put it back in his pants.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) you are right J :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the poem, wouldn`t worry too much about the structure, I think personally that syllable counting is pointless, as classical Japanese poetry is based on its own prounounciation and syntax, so Haikus, Senryüs, Tankas. Hokkus are simply culturally specific descriptions or forms in Japanese and not prescriptive. Only the new form of a lune haiku ( an American invention of the 60`s based on words) can be followed that closely. But that is the way I see it, many ( as they of course may ) see this in another way.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Leslie, I love the insight you gave :) it makes sense.

[SimpleMind]

Now I know where it all started :D

Good work! Long story in just few words, you're one great writer Marc!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow! glad you come back, :) lol yeah even the God's of Olympus sometimes have some dark lustful thingy lol.

[Trigorin]

Good work. You've fixed your mistakes.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tri, for reading this piece.

[Riley Bray]

I love greek mythology but I haven't heard of this tale, I like it. Your poem turned out nicely as well. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Riley, thank you for reading this piece.

[gombeggar]

hmm...zues was promiscuous...maybe still is

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah he is both male and female.

[gombeggar]

u r mislead

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The Greeks had some interesting ideas when it came to their gods and demi-gods. Men often had loving relationships with other men, especially the gods because in a strange way, they actually coveted the mortality that the human possessed. I quite liked this...I think the style is nice and the story is well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Girl :), I appreciate your precious time reading this piece.

[Lexi Richard]

Short, yet so full of details and descriptions. Leaves you mulling it over in your head after you've read it

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Lexi, appreciate your precious time reading this piece. :)

[Androglossia]

I'm not into Greek myth but I enjoyed your poem especially that kid thingy and the god's deviant behavior. It's slightly psychotic and perverted, the behavior. This is impressive. You and Belle seem to share the same interest:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Maryanne :) really? I will check Belle's work then. :) thanks.

[Jack...]

Very cool Marc. A tiny epic poem. Very cool indeed.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jack :)

[TL Boehm]

So you've just been writing for a month? I have some things I wrote when I was a new writer....uh...they weren't of this caliber. peace.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) thanks :)