Dark, cold and lonely space,
I cried, fears in my soul, confused about what the future may bring, Chaotic, heartless,
reality; we’re separated,
I've been hurt, I’ve languished pain, I’ve wished I never lost you, I've been
haunted, You never give me a chance
to call you my Mother,
It breaks my heart my little angel, we've made a terrible mistake, I dreamt about you and my
father, seems I have your eyes and I have my father’s face,
You look like your father my son, and your eyes, so beautiful like mine, I wish I could kiss you,
hold you and cry with you,
I am sorry; I am too scared to fight for you my baby boy, I wish you could hear my
voice and feel the beat of my heart, Sorry, I am sorry my angel, Goodbye…
Every year thousands of unwanted babies aborted, abortion is a massive ungodly practice of Doctors and Medical Practitioners that cost sometimes the life of the mother. I write this poem to give voice for those little angels that died and deprived a chance to live in this world.
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I really liked that you told this from two perspectives. It is hard on a mother to give away her child (at least I should hope that it is) and it is sad. You do a great job expressing the regret, fear, anxiety, and love felt by both mother and child in this piece. I will stay away from arguing the moral issues here I think this could be used to persuade others to change their minds on this topic. Very powerful, great job.
I'm glad you wrote this as someone who regretted the action. Others simply feel triumphant after. Again, a reality in words. Well written Marc, though I can't help but feel sad for those angels :(
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Yeah it is rampant around the world. I wish they will stop making-love or love-making if they can't .. read moreYeah it is rampant around the world. I wish they will stop making-love or love-making if they can't raise a child. :)
11 Years Ago
Ha! That'll never happen Marc! I guess what you're trying to say here is 'having sex' ... but I gues.. read moreHa! That'll never happen Marc! I guess what you're trying to say here is 'having sex' ... but I guess it's fine as long as both know how to control. Well, in our culture it's a different case :)
like the poem, the layout fine, the words well chosen. I think it would be too lenghty to discuss abortion here, so I will simply say that you have written a good poem
You picked a rather controversial subject with this one.
This is not something I personally would do (unless there were extreme medical circumstances and others were depending on me for their care as well), nor would I want any of my children to.
Now, having said that.. I'm not about to tell anyone else they can't. People have a myriad of reasons for such things. It is a personal choice and one I have no place in.
The back and forth conversational aspect you employed here was captivating.
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