Little Angel's Voice

The unwanted child

         

 

 

Dark, cold and lonely space,
I cried, fears in my soul, confused about what the future may bring,
Chaotic, heartless, reality; we’re separated,
I've been hurt, I’ve languished pain, I’ve wished I never lost you, I've been haunted,
You never give me a chance to call you my Mother,
It breaks my heart my little angel, we've made a terrible mistake,
I dreamt about you and my father, seems I have your eyes and I have my father’s face,
You look like your father my son, and your eyes, so beautiful like mine,
I wish I could kiss you, hold you and cry with you,
I am sorry; I am too scared to fight for you my baby boy,
I wish you could hear my voice and feel the beat of my heart,
Sorry, I am sorry my angel, Goodbye…

Author's Note

Every year thousands of unwanted babies aborted, abortion is a massive ungodly practice of Doctors and Medical Practitioners that cost sometimes the life of the mother. I write this poem to give voice for those little angels that died and deprived a chance to live in this world.

Reviews

[Imara]

I really liked that you told this from two perspectives. It is hard on a mother to give away her child (at least I should hope that it is) and it is sad. You do a great job expressing the regret, fear, anxiety, and love felt by both mother and child in this piece. I will stay away from arguing the moral issues here I think this could be used to persuade others to change their minds on this topic. Very powerful, great job.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks a lot Imara :)

[gabrielle]

The conversation of the would-be baby and the would-be mother is quite sad. However, i had reservation on this line: "You look like your father my son, and your eyes, so beautiful like mine," because i feel that these physical features are not yet visible on fetus.
Abortion is a hideous reality in our society. It is unfortunate that some people resort to this. But of course there are those who had to do it for medical reasons. A thought provoking write marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol Thanks Gab, but it is just imagination to add more in the story but some aborted babies already have physical features. Thanks for reading this piece.

[Rhianne Ney]

I agree with your thoughts, and sometimes though I don't want to procrastinate, I'm just wondering why these babies should be aborted, I mean, yeah, it might be hard for some to raise them but they can at least try and make an effort to let them live right?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Rhianne Ney, really I agree with your statement.

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome

[Gerald Parker]

Line 6: 'You never give me a chance to call you my Mother' - doesn't make sense - you've suddenly got the foetus talking. If you have lines in which the foetus is talking (!) perhaps put them in italics.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) it is just an imagination Sir, a communication between mothers and son during the abortion. OK I will put it italics.

[Mark]

So many years and the abortion issue is still so charged with emotion. We probably will never truly reach a mutual understanding in this country in regards to this. You are brave and talented to put yourself out there like this. I admire that, and your talent shines here. I felt great sorrow in this read. Very well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for your valuable insights in this piece, I am very thankful for your precious time reading this poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

A sad and powerful piece. Thank you for sharing.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ms. Rita :)

[emmajoy]

What a powerfully emotional piece of writing, less a poem, more a plea for understanding and forgiveness. Having to stop.. .. The two voices are almost choking the way i feel, trying to understand how desperation pushes a woman to act that way BUT sometimes circumstances are such that whatever belief, most woman bear the cross of guilt forever. Wanting a child or children is the tultimate for most women, tis for me.. seems unforgivable that the story behind your wonderful write is so rife in so many countries.

You write superbly, even there are small errors, If you'd like mention, will do so privately.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Emma Joy, I am glad for your honest review.

[Stella Armour]

As a mother and grandmother i felt the pain of this, it really hit home very hard. All children are are gift from God and are put in our care to help them grow. God bless all these little angels .....

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Stella we are in the page when it comes to this issue, I appreciate your kindness and your time reading this piece.

[s y e]

This seems to be a topic that is increasing lately. A new baby was found on a park bench and the mother had ran away. It is upsetting to hear.

This was a really upsetting piece, very emotional. Good job!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah it happening here in Dubai to much babies abandoned some died some are lucky to be alive.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks N.H for your precious time reading this piece.

[s y e]

I used to live in Dubai, it was very common there. It is really upsetting.

You're welcome.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) You speak the truth thanks again.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Marc, A very poingnant piece and well set out. A few offerings:
Dark, cold and lonely space,
I cried, fears in my soul, confused about what the future may bring,
Chaotic, heartless, reality; we’re separated,
I been hurt, I’ve languished pain, I’ve wished I never lost you, I've been haunted,
You never give me a chance to call you my Mother,
It breaks my heart my little angel, we've made a terrible mistake,
I dreamt about you and my father, seems I have your eyes and I have my father’s face,
You look like your father my son, and your eyes, so beautiful like mine,
I wish I could kiss you, hold you and cry with you,
I am sorry; I am too scared to fight for you my baby boy,
I wish you could hear my voice and feel the beat of my heart,
Sorry, I am sorry my angel, Goodbye…

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. John you always there for the support :) thanks a lot.

[Ency Bearis]

Impressive colloquy. Well portrayed mother and fetus with such exchange of conversation. I agree with you being a Roman Catholic I dislike abortion as well. Nice work kabayan.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you Sir Ency, appreciate your precious time reading this piece.