HALF OF MY LIFE

It was a gloomy morning--the sun covered by grey clouds

Rolling thunder echoes with the sound so loud.

Rain started to pour, I looked at the window;

Everything is depressing, I turn my back, I couldn't look at you

As you are there, lying in your bed chasing your breath.

It makes my body numb, stuck and I can’t move my feet.

Every time I look at you, it’s tearing my heart

I can’t accept the reality and I don’t know where to start,

Every time you call my name, it seems it is your last,

I can feel your heart slowing breaking like a fragile glass.

Now for the last time, I want to hold you,

I want to comfort you to end this sorrow.

If only I can give you half of my life

I will do it to extend your years, my loving wife.

My tears, your tears will fall, but remember me when you go,

Tomorrow I’ll face the world alone with this sorrow.

Half of my life will be with you; I promise we will see each other again

My loving wife, remember: there will be no tears in heaven.

Author's Note

I just want to reflect how my Father loves my Mother. My Mom died when I was small, she battles cancer all her life and it is hard for us to accept the reality especially my Father.

Reviews

[Dakshta]

When we lose someone close to us only we know how it feels, how we wish we would have given every single breath of ours to them, how we wish that it would have us instead of them.....you poured down every emotion in this white of yours..A really nice write Marc.

[Pax]

how touching ~ the echoes of sorrow of a lost other haft of your life... i did remember a poem back awhile ago ....a tearful end kabayan... cheers keep creating those beautiful works...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Pax actually this is my father and my Mother story the time when my Mother died. Thanks for your time reading my work.

[Pax]

i had the feeling you get that inspiration from... ano ba sakit ng mama mo... sa mama ko breast cancer ikinamatay niya...kaya i still remember the sufferings we suffer that time...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Ble Cancer din sa uterus, oo maliit pa kami nong namatay sia at nakita ko kung pano sya nag suffer. :(

[Pax]

how young were you?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

mga 8 years old maliit pa kami 5 kami na magkapatid

[Pax]

me i was in my fourth year highschool when she died... hirap nga yon kasi kami lang ng papa ko din kayod yung mga ate ko sa labas ng bansa para sa pagamot... the emotional burden was with us... while yung mga kapatid ko kayod sila...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Oo hirap talaga Pax siguro kung san ako ngayun dahil yun sa mama ko, I always strive hard for her dreams. kaya kahit mahirap kami naka pagtapos ako ng college.

[Pax]

segoro kung di nag abroad yung mga kapatid ko di segoro namin makaya lahat... ang laki ng gap 10 years between me and my sis... so nakapag aral ako dahil sa mga kapatid ko... kasi maaga rin natagal yung papa ko sa work niya... na early retire...kaya dama ko rin yung hirap... ngayon ako naman ang nag abroad then dama ko rin ang hirap dito... iba talaga dito sa Saudi kabayan, di kagayan diyan...sigh!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Don't give up, may time din para sa you, just be patient. it will be ok.

[Sami Khalil]

This is a very touching and heartfelt poem that chases sad breaths...Wonderful...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bro. glad you moved.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Ayvid N]

Marc...every beautiful line takes me right into the of the aggrieved subject overflowing with unfathomable sorrow and darkness. The parting is heartbreaking and the fear of it's arrival even worse. We live on an edge every moment...

A very poignant message in a very exquisitely crafted poem. Pen on.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Div, I always consider your words as a source of my inspiration.

[Ency Bearis]

Poignant poem that can touch anybody's heart, so emotional.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Ency :)

[Ency Bearis]

My pleasure and you're welcome

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

I liked the "...chasing your breath" part. That's clever.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

What's this, Marc? Fiction lang to, di ba? Grabe ka naman, ginawa mo talagang mamamatay yung asawa mo. Ayaw ko nito...Hehe. Lol :) Dramatic ang dating natin ngayon, Bro.:)
Let us fix some little slips in here: (CAPS)

'TWAS (or IT WAS) a gloomy morning AND the sun WAS COVERED by gray CLOUDS
Rolling thunder echoes WITH the sound so loud
Rain started to POUR, I LOOKED at the window
Everything is depressing; I can’t LOOK BACK at you

It makes my body numb, I'M SCARED, I can’t move my feet

I CAN'T SEE YOU BREAKING like a fragile glass (fading is to color; breaking is to glass)

I will do it to extend YOUR LIFE being my loving wife
My tears, YOUR tears will fall, BUT remember me when you go
Tomorrow I’ll face the world alone with THIS sorrow

Maliliit lang naman yun...tenses of verb, tapos yung iba plural/singular noun, addition of pronouns lang. Baka nakalimutan mo lang. Smile! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Nag earthquake na alog ako lol :) heheh thanks di your such a supportive friend :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Dhaye :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

No Dhaye it is my Mother and my Father story.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sad story. (: Just have faith. Keep on going. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

To feel you lose a love is devastating, it can chew for years, and a person can feel it, the fear, the insecurity, the pain that comes with while never speak it out, it can grow slowly inside of you, and then when it happens... it's really there. Sad beauty here my friend, you captured that so well.... excellent work.

- Elisa

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Friend, your words is always an inspiration to me. Thanks for your time reading my work. :)

My pleasure, really, thank you for writing so beautifully :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Welcome friend.

[Terohime]

Very touching poem, great job.
~your friend Res

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Res, glad you are here :) it means a lot. Thank you.

[Pink Witch]

Sorry for your mother. When someone close is not there anymore, heart prefers to lie than to bear the sorrow. The lines are very touching and deep. Good work.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you Pink Witch, your review means a lot to me :) thanks.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I just want to reflect how my Father loves my Mother. My Mom died when I was small, she battles cancer all her life and it is hard for us to accept the reality especially my Father.