I just want to reflect how my Father loves my Mother. My Mom died when I was small, she battles cancer all her life and it is hard for us to accept the reality especially my Father.
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When we lose someone close to us only we know how it feels, how we wish we would have given every single breath of ours to them, how we wish that it would have us instead of them.....you poured down every emotion in this white of yours..A really nice write Marc.
Tears burn their way into my eyes as I read the gut wrenching piece that you have so honestly and sadly penned here. We are never the same, and it never goes away, we just learn how to continue to live with this inside of us.
Deeply, profoundly agonizing.
Thanks Ronie, Thanks for your precious time reading my work.
11 Years Ago
It was my pleasure...in one way or another...loss is something we all have in common, but its mark o.. read moreIt was my pleasure...in one way or another...loss is something we all have in common, but its mark on each of us is unique.
the first stanza has effectively set a gloomy and foreboding scene. the succeeding lines- heartbreaking. The pain of losing someone we love is truly indescribably painful. Very touching and sad write kabayan.
I know you have only been at this a short time Marc but what you just wrote is very touching. I am thankful to have met such a talented person. Don't you dare quit writing. It comes from the heart and I see you have a GREAT BIG OL HEART. Great job again and I will be checking out the rest of your poems here shortly. Thanks again for sharing...Mahalo
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks, such words is precious that empowers me to continue, thanks a lot for the kind words. Apprec.. read moreThanks, such words is precious that empowers me to continue, thanks a lot for the kind words. Appreciate your precious time reading my work.
'our tears will not reach in heaven' - not sure what you mean by 'reach.' Not sure if this is genuine or imagined.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Reach means all pains only in earth, in heaven no weep of tears.
11 Years Ago
Thanks for your time reading Mr. Wiseman I appreciate your precious time.
11 Years Ago
In that case you mean 'there will be no tears in heaven.'
11 Years Ago
yah that's my original words but second revised sounds not familiar so I go with words not been used.. read moreyah that's my original words but second revised sounds not familiar so I go with words not been used.
11 Years Ago
'tears will not reach' is not English, it does not make sense.
11 Years Ago
:) it is Filipino lol :)
11 Years Ago
Alright I will change it :)
11 Years Ago
When faced with something such as this you can stop being a teacher Gerald.
11 Years Ago
:) Thanks Mr. Ken it is ok, Mr. Gerald is cool :)
11 Years Ago
Yes, teaching scars one for life - like being in a Gulag.
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