HALF OF MY LIFE

It was a gloomy morning--the sun covered by grey clouds

Rolling thunder echoes with the sound so loud.

Rain started to pour, I looked at the window;

Everything is depressing, I turn my back, I couldn't look at you

As you are there, lying in your bed chasing your breath.

It makes my body numb, stuck and I can’t move my feet.

Every time I look at you, it’s tearing my heart

I can’t accept the reality and I don’t know where to start,

Every time you call my name, it seems it is your last,

I can feel your heart slowing breaking like a fragile glass.

Now for the last time, I want to hold you,

I want to comfort you to end this sorrow.

If only I can give you half of my life

I will do it to extend your years, my loving wife.

My tears, your tears will fall, but remember me when you go,

Tomorrow I’ll face the world alone with this sorrow.

Half of my life will be with you; I promise we will see each other again

My loving wife, remember: there will be no tears in heaven.

Author's Note

I just want to reflect how my Father loves my Mother. My Mom died when I was small, she battles cancer all her life and it is hard for us to accept the reality especially my Father.

Reviews

[Dakshta]

When we lose someone close to us only we know how it feels, how we wish we would have given every single breath of ours to them, how we wish that it would have us instead of them.....you poured down every emotion in this white of yours..A really nice write Marc.

[zainul]

Great write.
You have spoken on behalf of me and many others.
Thanks for your efforts.

[Jo Todd]

The Poem is beautiful, such feeling. Its given me goosebumps.
You really captured the helplessness we feel when there is nothing more we can do for a loved one.

[Rogue]

What a beautiful picture you painted of his love for her. This is extremely moving and emotional. Your wording and thoughts here are very heart wrenching and tender.

Wonderful, Marc!

[Imelda Blackheart]

Hello! You recently entered this piece into my contest "What is your most powerful story," and I wanted you to know that you are a finalist! I don't know if you are going to be one of the TOP finalists (I wish I could choose more than three now!) but I wanted you to know that out of 60 people you are one of the top 12! Congratulations!

PS. I loved this so much! I can't wait to see more like this from you in the future!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Imelda I appreciate it. :)

[Eddie Phillips]

You tapped into the emotional current of loss very well. It moved me to read this poem. Such love and tenderness in the words. Keep writing my brother.

[InsanityWriter]

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. Amazingly done. :) I'm very sorry for your loss. :(

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks IW :)

[Pete Langley]

This is very moving, Marc. You have re-enacted the total desolation of loss, of the heart stove in two. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Pete :)

[SM Davis]

This is a lovely tribute. It seems a bit disjointed in areas, almost like you were reaching for the words to rhyme. I think this may have been better as a prose piece. Your imagery, however, is impeccable.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks SM :)

[SM Davis]

:-)

[Writer #00]

Beyond words. I cried, and my tears say all.

I offer my prayers and comfort...even if you aren't religious.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for the comfort and prayers, I really appreciate your precious time in reading and connected to my poem.

[Writer #00]

You're welcome.