The Rage Against Poseidon (RAGE TANKA)

We can't judge right away unless we know the backstory.

 

 

Her lips hex venom

Diabolic mind paints gore

Gives  horrific death

Crawling in the underworld

Rage is inexorable

Author's Note

I wrote this poem to give voice for Medusa one of the character in Greek mythology. I have this thought to give voice for her rage after Poseidon rape her and Athena turned her into a monster. I think she deserved a voice.

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

There is a based mythological aspect to this, (brought in though the title specifically, and then later on with use of "the underworld") that the captures imagination, and brings colour and visualisation to the fury and torment you portray. This said a lot, brought little - well done

[Ohhhwillow]

Someone has been watching Clash of The Titans haha!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This is a rage of Medusa after Poseidon rape her and Athena turn her into monster, in the realm of Hades. Thanks Willow glad you drop by and give this beautiful insights.

[Ohhhwillow]

I know the story heehee, it' no problem, anytime!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow :) we really connect when it comes to great mythology :) thanks Willow.

[Writer #00]

OOh, nice Medusa poem...this is Medusa, right?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah :) thanks for the interest! glad you came.

[Writer #00]

No problem. Was the third line grey in reference to her paralysis?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

No it is a death when you at her :) I am very impressed you have a good background for Medusa.

[Writer #00]

I like mythology.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Me too, I am craving for it :) lol.

[Gerald Parker]

What is point of this? Why are you writing stuff like this? TRY writing from personal experience.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol ok Sir, I just write this reference from Greek Mythology I like the greeks :) but next poem I will do what you said. Thanks.

[Gerald Parker]

Not my sort of stuff. P.A.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol anyway Thanks Mr. Wiseman.

[Gerald Parker]

Ok, fine, if you like mythology and stuff but make it apply to your life.

[Rita L. Sev]

The form and brevity of your poem add to the intensity of the emotion. "Diabolic mind paints gore, gives horrific death..." perfectly expressed. Well done!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ms. Rita, I just give Medusa a voice after the tribulation she experienced.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Mark, should this be read as Tanka from the Japanese or English perspective? Also, it seems to deviate from most descriptions of this form. I could be wrong on that. What's your take on it?

I think it would help more random readers if you would consider including a note about the form and background material in the author notes; in the future, of course. I got the gist of it from reading the comments of the other reviewers. I have no opinion on this form so I'll just say that the words and construction seem appropriate.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

The backstory is all about the rage of Medusa after Poseidon rape her and Athena turned her into a monster. I just give the voice of Medusa how she feels after this gods and goddesses of Olympus betray and abused her. So the rage coming from the abused and betrayals.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for your time reading my work, I appreciate it.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am not sure about if this is Japs or Uncle Sam but the format is tanka in general I think lol :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I will take note your suggestion next poem I will do it. Thanks Sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

makes us wonder what brought on this rage.

is there reason? unlike so much of the violence that goes on in the world today...much of it just so random.

intense short piece.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This is the rage of Medusa Mr. Jacob after Poseidon rape her and Athena turned her into a monster in realm of hades. I just give voice to Medusa :) how she feels after the gods and goddesses of Olympus abused and betray her.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

then there "is" reason, yes.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Thanks Mr. Jacob.

[Frieda P]

Darkly went the Tanka, and oh so methodically, there's a madness to your method. ha... Good one Marc, love that first line, it's a killer!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I just want to give a voice to Medusa how she create this rage. Poseidon rape her and Athena make her a monster. So her voice need to be heard :) thanks Frie. Thanks for the kind words.

[Frieda P]

I'm starting to realize how your brilliant, but twisted
mind works. lol My pleasure always Marc!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol we are the same, twisted mind hahahah that's why we are friends. lol thanks Frie. take care.

[Frieda P]

hahaha my point exactly friend! ;-) x

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie :)

[AYVID N]

A beautiful picture painted of evil and rage...
The message superbly conveyed. All the lines are impressive but I liked,

"Her lips hex venom
Diabolic mind paints gore' - Stunning Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Div. I really appreciate your time reading my work. I am just fascinated for the unfortunate life Medusa experienced being rape by Poseidon that's why to give her voice why she become Evil I think is important. Why she become bad because of the abused and betrayal of olympus gods and goddesses.

[AYVID N]

I agree Marc. Hell hath the fury of a woman scorned.
I love all your mythological work.
Just a request...please include a little background with such writes.
It the becomes a real pleasure for the reader! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sure thanks Div :)

[Terohime]

A great write, short but full of talent. Love it. Keep writing.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Res, I am very grateful for you in believing my work, thanks a lot. :) happy writing.

[Terohime]

anytime ^^

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:)

[Eddie Phillips]

This was a great Tanka. I judge this poem to be excellent! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother, this is the backstory of Medusa.

[Eddie Phillips]

I deemed as much from your picture. I thought it was masterfully done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother your words mean a lot to me, it empowers me to write more. :) thanks!