Kicking Dark Witch

Kicking Dark Witch

A Poem by Marc Marlon Villaflor
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Tinkerbell,Peter Pan,Snowhite,Huntsman and Rapunzel v.s the Dark Witch

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Running steed ridden by a headless warrior,

Flowing dark clouds dim the forest core,

The Evil Dragon spite fire to the realm of the magical forest,

Send off all princess and fairies lost into the haze,

 

The Dark Witch hexes, raising her hands into the sky,

Thunder and lightning strikes from a distance mile,

The cosmos of Fantasia suddenly awakens,

All fairies and princess frightfully shaken,

Precipitously skies glistening, soaring Tinkerbell and Peter Pan,

Gear up for war is Princess Snowhite and the Huntsman,

Now the Dragon stumbles and blinded because of Tinkerbell,

Dark soldiers crushed by the hair of Rapunzel ,

Peter Pan does all the runs, circling the Witch and tied her by his hand,

Snowhite embeds the golden dagger to the Dark Witch's heart,

The Huntsman slashes the monster body and breaks her apart,

Explosions comes after split seconds,

The Witch and her evil creatures vanished for good in the fairies  land.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2013 Marc Marlon Villaflor


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OK, I need some guidance from you, Mark. On what aspects of the poem would you have me comment? Here are your choices: Emotional, Material, Form, Grammatical, Context, Sensory, Substance, Message, Audience, Vainpraise. Please, let me know. Thanks.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

I am glad you said that :) it really helps.
Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat

11 Years Ago

Yes, all well and good but how have you interpreted what I said? That may be the more important asp.. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

I interpreted it as good, a balance one, from there I will learn to accept the truth, It is almost 1.. read more



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Pax
this piece made me smiling... all the characters of the fairytales are here... even the one in the movies is here... you've mixed them up in perfect harmony, no conflict to each protagonist... i enjoyed your playful write kabayan... your indeed growing in your imagination... keep it up!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Pax for the kind words, I just it a try :) lol I am glad you like it too. Cheers!
This is absolutely stunning, Marc! I loved how you married all the Disney Fairytale Characters and spun your own twist in the mix. This really took me back to my childhood, even early tween years, reading faerie tales, that you so eloquently weaved some enchanting yet dark imagery into this write. I love writings/poetry that take me away for a bit and in this write, you have done an outstanding job! Thanks for sharing and Pen on! *favs.*

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

You are in Florida?
ms. barrie

11 Years Ago

reality wise, yes
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Good place, love the place. But never been there, if I think florida maybe because of the orange.
Great job, well written. I enjoyed it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

s y e

11 Years Ago

Hahahaha yay!
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks again! :)
s y e

11 Years Ago

Welcome!
This piece has a lot going on. I found myself hopping from image to image and in turn thought to thought. I like the fairy tale imagery, and I often use historical or fantastical figures in my own writing, but I tend to keep it to one or two references. When you put too many of them in there are once the reader sometimes has a hard time following. My suggestion would be to choose one or two "heros" to battle your dark witch. This would also allow you to play a little more with imagery and metaphor.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks I will to shape it up next time :) Thanks for the review.
A great fanciful write...Pen on...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Brother :)
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

:)
A mind boggling, thought provoking, story poem or fairy tale of sort that can be apt for children. Various presentation that what I can say.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Sir Ency :)
Ency Bearis

11 Years Ago

You're welcome.
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

:)
Finally, someone has taken down that Wicked Witch! A fun and fanciful idea, executed well in this piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Ms. Rita, I just give a try :) thanks for your time.
Marc you are such a brave writer to tackle such subjects when your first language is not English. A few observations to improve on a wonderful fantasy:
The cosmos of fantasia suddenly awaken-The cosmos of fantasia suddenly awakens
Snowhite embed the golden dagger to the Dark Witch's heart-Snowhite embeds the golden dagger to the Dark Witch's heart
Explosions comes after a split seconds-Explosions come after split seconds

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Mr. John :) lol I just try new things :)
Okay my head is all over the place with this one...fairy tales, war & peace, rescues, youth, escapism and happy endings, you've got everything except Robin Hood in this one....woo, lot to take in here. I guess it's still a story of darkness being overcome by light or good, fancy way to get there, intriguing read Marc.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Lol :) thanks Frie, I just try to write some new stuff :) thanks for liking it. though I am not sure.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Hey, that's what we all do, try...that's where the muse takes you, you take the journey, I had a few.. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

;) lol thanks friend.
OK, I need some guidance from you, Mark. On what aspects of the poem would you have me comment? Here are your choices: Emotional, Material, Form, Grammatical, Context, Sensory, Substance, Message, Audience, Vainpraise. Please, let me know. Thanks.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

I am glad you said that :) it really helps.
Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat

11 Years Ago

Yes, all well and good but how have you interpreted what I said? That may be the more important asp.. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

I interpreted it as good, a balance one, from there I will learn to accept the truth, It is almost 1.. read more

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DIFC Dubai International Financial Center, Dubai City, United Arab Emirates



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