Kicking Dark Witch

Tinkerbell,Peter Pan,Snowhite,Huntsman and Rapunzel v.s the Dark Witch

 

Running steed ridden by a headless warrior,

Flowing dark clouds dim the forest core,

The Evil Dragon spite fire to the realm of the magical forest,

Send off all princess and fairies lost into the haze,

 

The Dark Witch hexes, raising her hands into the sky,

Thunder and lightning strikes from a distance mile,

The cosmos of Fantasia suddenly awakens,

All fairies and princess frightfully shaken,

Precipitously skies glistening, soaring Tinkerbell and Peter Pan,

Gear up for war is Princess Snowhite and the Huntsman,

Now the Dragon stumbles and blinded because of Tinkerbell,

Dark soldiers crushed by the hair of Rapunzel ,

Peter Pan does all the runs, circling the Witch and tied her by his hand,

Snowhite embeds the golden dagger to the Dark Witch's heart,

The Huntsman slashes the monster body and breaks her apart,

Explosions comes after split seconds,

The Witch and her evil creatures vanished for good in the fairies  land.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

OK, I need some guidance from you, Mark. On what aspects of the poem would you have me comment? Here are your choices: Emotional, Material, Form, Grammatical, Context, Sensory, Substance, Message, Audience, Vainpraise. Please, let me know. Thanks.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Wow! seems you are an expert, whatever your mind speaks and your heart feel I will appreciate it big time. thanks for the honest thought you have.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

Ah, well, if you don't need anything specific then how about this: it turns the innocent side of childhood on its head while at the same time castigating and miscasting color into an arbitrary place holder for biased philosophies of good and evil. How's that? :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Fine :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am glad you said that :) it really helps.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

Yes, all well and good but how have you interpreted what I said? That may be the more important aspect of the feedback.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I interpreted it as good, a balance one, from there I will learn to accept the truth, It is almost 1 month now I am writing and I don't have a good background in poetry, so I have a long road to go. I tried so many style in writing as you observed I wrote a lot, also some short story. This comment will helps to build a more promising portfolio and I value every single comments I got, bad or good it solidify my chance to become a good writer someday. :)

[Dakshta]

Jeez man I'm so angry with you right now!! Atleast give me one chance to criticize your work! But no, you always have to write the perfect piece don't you?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) thanks my friend :) I am just trying lol :) thanks a lot for your time. I very happy to have you here.

[Dakshta]

same here :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am just writing for a month and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank you I love you all.