A Black Heart (Tanka)

A Black Heart (Tanka)

A Poem by Marc Marlon Villaflor

 

 

Cerulean sky

Reflects in my naked eye

The day you left me

You quell my own destiny

A selfish one with black heart

© 2013 Marc Marlon Villaflor


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Marc Marlon Villaflor

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This is nice. I love the thought. However, I am not comfortable with how you state the last two lines. I think there's redundancy in there.



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

11 Years Ago

These are what I am not comfortable of:

"You quell my own destiny"---My own is used if.. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

lol its alright Dhaye maybe I need to at it, since there some confusion about the words. Thanks for .. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

lol its alright Dhaye maybe I need to have second look reviewing the poem, since there some confusio.. read more
hmm...bit of hard coal to such a heart

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Gom glad you dropping by and for the reads thank you.
Nice metaphor in Tanka, great poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Sir Ency, thanks for the review.
Very cool Marc. keep'em coming

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Mr. Jack it is really a great time having your time. Thanks a lot.
Haha, this was great! I am really enjoying your Tankas!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks N.H thank you, :) I am happy you appreciate my tanka :)
I am thoroughly enjoying your Tankas, tanka very much. This is vivid in black & white and says so much. Ouch.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

heheeh yes :) it is really a true story Frie :) lol such a black heart hahah :)
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ouchie again...poor you ;-)
I like your use of color in this piece. A black heart can erase the hope of the future. Nicely penned.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thansk Ice you have a very good insight in this piece, I appreciate your time reading my piece.
Artwork and words made the point in the poem. Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Thanks Sir, I am glad you stop by :)

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Added on April 11, 2013
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Marc Marlon Villaflor
Marc Marlon Villaflor

DIFC Dubai International Financial Center, Dubai City, United Arab Emirates



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I am just writing for almost 2 months now and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank y.. more..

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