oh... a haiku... the police is hidding around... but you're all good! lol :D
Beautiful work!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Lol thanks Pax, yeah the Haiku police is always in the corner, it is good Dhaye is here to guide me... read moreLol thanks Pax, yeah the Haiku police is always in the corner, it is good Dhaye is here to guide me. Thanks a lot for the reads Kabayan :)
lol really, I am afraid writing a Haiku, too many Haiku police around the corner lol :) thanks for .. read morelol really, I am afraid writing a Haiku, too many Haiku police around the corner lol :) thanks for the reads.
11 Years Ago
Haha. Am I one of them? I hope I haven't give you any upsetting word. Haiku is a short kind of poet.. read moreHaha. Am I one of them? I hope I haven't give you any upsetting word. Haiku is a short kind of poetry, next to Couplet, but it does requires much attention when it comes to format because just what I said before, many poets stick to the traditional format of Japanese poetry which for them is best (as I see in others works in books, etc). Actually, I am afraid, too. This is my 2nd time to make such kind of poem.
Before I forgot, you used not only alliteration here, but also assonance. A combination of two or more literary devices is really amazing. You're an amazing poet, Marc. You are very good in free verse, and even long poems in rhymes, so don't be afraid of Haiku. Let's just practice it putting all the thoughts in just 3 lines or more or less 17 syllables. Cheers!
11 Years Ago
What I mean is, Restoration is my 2nd try to make a Haiku. :)
11 Years Ago
Thanks for the info Dhaye :) lol I am very thankful for your thought. just remind me if I crossed th.. read moreThanks for the info Dhaye :) lol I am very thankful for your thought. just remind me if I crossed the board. You are a great poet too, cheers for all the writers!
11 Years Ago
Actually, you're one of my favorite writers here. To be specific, two of your works are my favorite:.. read moreActually, you're one of my favorite writers here. To be specific, two of your works are my favorite: Stranger and Box Rain Dark. I really love them and I can't forget the music (which I downloaded) you used. :)
lol thanks Dhaye, you know I am struggling because some of my friends doesn't believe in this craft .. read morelol thanks Dhaye, you know I am struggling because some of my friends doesn't believe in this craft :) but to hear things like this, it made me a second thought to pursue this passion. Thanks a lot for the appreciation your words is an inspiration always. The music I always select it by my heart, I always put myself into the poem and hear this music to make it a perfect piece. :) Thanks a lot Dhaye.
11 Years Ago
"... a second thought to pursue this passion." - Nobody should hinder us in our passion. Keep going.. read more"... a second thought to pursue this passion." - Nobody should hinder us in our passion. Keep going.
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I am just writing for almost 2 months now and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank y.. more..