5 Senses and 5 elements of Life

5 Senses and 5 elements of Life

Solid - feel -my human touch

Sun - see -the fire within my soul

Sweet - taste-of water slowly streaming through my cosmos

Sonata - hear -the wind awaken our illumination

Scents - smell -the richness of earth's abundance

Reviews

[Gerald Parker]

Hi there overworked amigo,
this poem is a bold undertaking,
far riskier than gamble millions in stocks and shares,
I've made a few grammatical changes:

5 Senses and 5 elements of Life

Solid - feel my human touch

Sun - see the fire within my soul

Sweet - taste of water slowly streaming through my cosmos

Sonata - hear the wind awaken our illumination

Scents - smell the richness of earth's abundance

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Gerald lol :) actually I divide this for 3 thanks for the review and suggestion.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am just writing for a month and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank you, I love you all.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sorry but to clear all things regarding the format I will call my piece as Makhu. This is a free expression short creative poem in different format. So I will not categorized it specifically for Japs Haiku and Sanriyu but it has a distinctive touch of the two that expressed in unique and abstract form.