The LOOP

 

Twisted faith embedded in his timeline

Dreaming, chasing the reality that never was.

Pain and dark past hunted the disturbed soul

Images inducing as relic of gone memories

The loop continues with no sign of restraint

Giving a gloomy life of suffering

His mind wants a quick end to this fictitious realm

His heart beats slow seems the faith is gone

Where he is heading is a mystery

What will be his future will defend in his memory

 

The struggles continue in eternity

Dark room, isolated soul plead for freedom.

Countless attempts failed to break the flap

End up into breakdown of ragged dreams

The loop continues with no sign of restraint

Giving pain and locks the memory into darkness

His mind wishing for an absolute end

His heart beats in unfamiliar pound

A silence comes after the tumult inside the dome

Now his soul in peace, he achieves freedom.

 

The loop stops in eternity

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see someone suffering at the end of his life, just praying for death to come and relieve him of this.

the letting go...the understanding that it will never be the same...the he that once was physically strong is gone...and it is time to "go gentle into that good night"---

nice piece...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jacob your insight is always an inspiration for a newbie like me, thanks a lot for the support.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I mean it is biblical which I applied it here not really my original idea :)

[Gerald Parker]

Imagine nothing. Nothing comes out of nothing. And yet it explodes. You have no need of a review from me.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Gerald for your insight, but I believe, Nothingness wont resonates for what we have seen and feel in this world. There is always blue print of everything, coded, conceived and design by great creator.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

History, Mutations, Technology, Civilization and Culture all starts from the evolving mind or designers, people, scientist, historian and lifestyle of group of people. everything is evolving from time immemorial.

[gombeggar]

did u mean 'haunted' or 'hunted' in yer 3rd line

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

hunted

[Holly Mason]

a loop -a circular movement like life
close it leave it open
very inventive piece of writing
thank you for sharing

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Holly for the great insight, I always value your reads. Thanks a lot.

[Gerald Parker]

Whoever is caught up in this loop needs to get out of it. Pronto. The loop stops in eternity. Now there's a thought to tangle with. When does eternity come? Do you mean when each of us dies. Or rather, aren't we already in eternity? If so. why hasn't the loop stopped? You've got some explaining to do.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

The loops covers a lot including death. The suffering and the cycles of the loop will stop when we give our last breath.

[Gerald Parker]

Imagine nothing. Nothing comes out of nothing. And yet it explodes.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Nothingness wont resonates for what we have seen and feel in this world. There is always blue print of everything, coded, conceived and design by great creator.

[Gerald Parker]

Not him again! He seems to get everywhere! Are you saying that the great creator has always been around, that there was no beginning, and that there will be no end. Where do you get your ideas about the great creator from? Are you believing the old twaddle that to exist a machine must have an inventor? Who invented the greaeaeaeaet creatoooooor?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Can you answer that question? I believe everything comes from the creation theory, Just like your parents created you.

[Gerald Parker]

Man cannot understand what we cannot step outside of, so we make up stories. They are only stories.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Man create stories just like you create your own belief. I believe in creation and I don't believe things come out from nothing. Look around Mr. Gerald, everything is created.

[Gerald Parker]

No, it evolved, everything EVOLVED.......dust, stars, planets, apes, germs, ants.... but from what?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Everything created from the concepts.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Just like your body was formed from the sperm and egg of your parents. Your parents wanted a baby so there is concept for that from the beginning before your mother brought you in this world. They want a baby that is a concept of creating a family.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I think this help a lot. :)

[Gerald Parker]

It is too simplistic to attempt an understanding of how our universe came to be what it has become by basing it on human experience. We are dealing with something that is outside our ability to understand. We have to step outside the tent to see what's outside. It's the same with understanding how everything we know and don't know about came about. You can't use manmade ideas to grasp something so enormous.

[Gerald Parker]

Must be time you went to bed.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

We will continue tomorrow the big bang theory I need to sleep now its late thanks Mr.Gerald I'll be back see yah.

[Jack...]

Everything in life moves in a circualr pattern...what goes around comes around. I found this very insightful and it cuts a groove in the scenery to show us an undending path that we all walk on...always. Very cool Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jack :) I am thankful for great insight coming from a great writer :) thanks a lot for your time reading my work.

[francis]

the loops in one's life are so numerous that sometimes it escorts us to our graves.some we can solve and others we can't

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Francis for brilliant insight,thanks for reading.

[Pete Langley]

The loop is misery, and the only way to break it is to use the resources you have - your strengths, bodily and intellectually - and then summoning the will to use them, Marc. Never give up, man. There`s much for you to do! P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Pete you are such an inspiration thanks for reading.

[Tarry Franck]

Such sadness - a great piece. Job well done my friend!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tarry glad the piece moves you, thanks again.

[Frieda P]

Sad and touching write, for me I could see someone wounded and torn perhaps after war, with no one and going no where...pain and dark memories haunt him. Lots of dark emotions in this one Marc....nice job.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie, you are always an inspirations to thanks a lot.

[s y e]

This was a good piece, the message was clear as we have loads of places we get stuck in.

Nicely written

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Noodlehead glad you like the piece.

[s y e]

Welcome :-)