Magical Reality

A sad reflection of my life.

 

 

Gushing passion colors the canvas

Giving breath to the voluptuous mermaid

Paints her soul in a cerulean sea

Glistening flaccid pearls surrounded her body

Golden sinuous hair crown the dazzling likeness

Each brush expands the splendor  

Giving life to the sea urchins and hippocampus

A castle of promise painted with love

All the things have been created and shaped into life

A magical world under the sea

But I am sad; all creation eternally happy except me

In reality, I am the painter of this ingenious artwork.

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. The last two lines give this a very poignant touch which is nice, but I'd be careful not to go overboard on the description in this - it's very rich, almost too rich in some places. I personally would have liked to have seen a little simpler language here and there, with the great imagery you have as bursts of color in the piece, instead of being its entire substance. Everything in moderation.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tri, a word from you is always a treasure, thanks a lot.

[Pete Langley]

The inspiration for this piece is superb art - if it`s yours, Marc, you should be justly proud .....but I understand the paradox in your poem, I think. There are few - if any- creators of art that at any stage are completely satisfied with what they create. They always feel that there is something more they need to do. In many cases ,they consider they cannot improve on the beauty of the subject they are painting or writing about. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Pete this piece is my life. It illustrate how hard to be as migrant worker far from my family, just like in painting the painter can't enter the realm of magical painting It is impossible. That's the flight of migrant worker also they gave better life but they can't be with their family. Thanks a lot for reading Mr. Pete.

[Rogue]

I love the image that you placed with this piece. Your words expand it even further into lovely magic and mystery.

Very nice work here. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Rogue, this is a true story :) I am painting but I can't be inside the painting. This reflects in my real life. I work for my family but I can't be there in the Philippines a sad life of a migrant workers. Working and living alone in the Middle East. Thanks for your time reading my work.

[Dhaye]

As always, good choice of image and music again, plus the captivating lines of this fantastic piece. I like your total artistry here.
I am just curious, where's your hometown, Marc? You had never mentioned that before.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am from Bacolod City :) I am near to your place lol :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for your time reading my work, your words is always an inspiration.

[Dhaye]

Ah, yes. I remember. You mentioned it in our group Kabayan Atin Ito. Sorry, I forgot.
Okay, time to say goodbye. Tomorrow is another day. Hehe!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) see yah

[Sami Khalil]

"A castle of promise painted with love



All the things has been created and shaped into life



A magical world under the sea."
I like how you compare your country to a mermaid and how you bestow on her all the charm and magic. It shows your love and admiration to her. Well penned and created...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yea you know Brother, It is my true story, I am working my whole life giving the better life for my family. They are happy in the Philippines but I am sad here alone in the Middle east working, it is just like a beautiful painting in the canvas it is wonderful, like my family in the Philippines but I can't be there.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for reading this piece it is a reflection of my reality far from my family.

[Sami Khalil]

Some of us are in this boat of exile and longing to go back to our countries ... As long as they are happy that should give you solace but I know that is hard to do. I hope you can make it and go back to live your original dream...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes Brother someday :)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I missed my family and my country. I wrote this piece when I am thinking my country the Philippines. I missed the blue beaches and the beautiful people :). I hope you enjoy reading this piece.

[Jem Sagcal]

I absolutely love the imagery and how well you made the idea of mermaid so creative and beautiful. That picture you included added to the beauty you wished to express with this poem.

At first the poem starts out as something to describe such beauty, but I was then caught when the poem ended into such a sad line that draws back all reality.

I must say that I absolutely love this poem.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi Jem, thanks a lot, you are always an inspiration to me, all your words I value it more. I wish you will not stop reading my work. Thanks :)

[Jem Sagcal]

Aw, you needn't say that.
And you are absolutely welcome!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) thanks again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not fair...the painter paints happiness for others but can't find that feeling for himself.

well done...first line might be "gushing passion colors the cavass"

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jacob life is always not fair lol :) thanks for your honest review. I will consider changing the "passion" thanks a lot.