Magical Reality

A sad reflection of my life.

 

 

Gushing passion colors the canvas

Giving breath to the voluptuous mermaid

Paints her soul in a cerulean sea

Glistening flaccid pearls surrounded her body

Golden sinuous hair crown the dazzling likeness

Each brush expands the splendor  

Giving life to the sea urchins and hippocampus

A castle of promise painted with love

All the things have been created and shaped into life

A magical world under the sea

But I am sad; all creation eternally happy except me

In reality, I am the painter of this ingenious artwork.

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. The last two lines give this a very poignant touch which is nice, but I'd be careful not to go overboard on the description in this - it's very rich, almost too rich in some places. I personally would have liked to have seen a little simpler language here and there, with the great imagery you have as bursts of color in the piece, instead of being its entire substance. Everything in moderation.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tri, a word from you is always a treasure, thanks a lot.

[Marie]

Lovely magical poem. And if you created this ingenious artwork, you should certainly be happy.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am happy you appreciate my work Ms. Marie I know your taste :) thanks a lot for reading my poem.

[gombeggar]

expression of the trouble and frustration of the artist...interesting subject matter in the mermaid

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Gom love your review, thanks for the reads. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

The beauty of the magical undersea world really expressed flawlessly here. The suffering of the creator - happy to see what he has created shine, even at the expense of his own joy... affecting. Great write.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Your words always an inspiration to me, thank you for your kind review my friend :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

I agree with Pete in that an artist will find his nirvana within his creation....its all escapism, isn't it?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah :) thanks Dr. for your time reading this piece.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Marc a poignant and flowing write full of personal pathos!
One suggestion:
All the things have been created and shaped into life

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. John thanks always for the support, I appreciate it.

[Melissa Rose]

I've always loved mermaids, and I draw them all the time, though I've yet to paint them. The music is beautiful, and suits the dreamlike, sad quality of the words. Well done. I really enjoyed that.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Melissa glad you like it :)

[Pete Langley]

Ah, now I understand, Marc. The need to escape reality into the comfort of art. I just hope you achieve your dreams, my friend. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Pete, though my english is bad, but I have tried my best. In this world of poetry, I can be somebody and it helps channeled creativity.

[Frieda P]

I am in love with this one Marc...we are truly never satisfied within our work, we send our thoughts of grandeur out into the world, but always with that inner twist that we are not as such. Remember in her mysterious beauty, mermaids are nothing but an illusion. Magnifico!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Gracie :) Frie, yes it's true. This piece is a sad part of my life, my story is like a painter I paint a dreams but I can't be there. My work as a migrant workers defined the lonely world I have far from my family and my country. Thanks a lot for reading.

[Frieda P]

This truly touched my heart Marc, I feel your work even more intensely now...my pleasure always, it's perfect.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks always my friend :)

[Frieda P]

Always :-)

[Emily Feret]

wow, what a mystical read!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Em :) glad you like it!