The Goddess of Titans and The Soldier

 

 

 

She unbolts her senses, her visions become hazy.

The feisty beat of her heart unchanged

She gasps, as her dark hour comes near.

She remembers the past, how complex it was

Tears wither in her solitary eyes

Her mother lost her mind in her solemn space

Her childhood life was a complete mess

A home she wished turn out to be coop

They scratched the shallow of her universe

She was bushed and gloomy

Until the day she found love

A real love, worth fighting for.

They both enjoyed the sweetness of milk and honey

But war separated these two loving hearts

Painted sorrows every night and day

Her lonely heart longing for him from a distance

Days, months and years had passed with a broken dream

The time had come, her stars unleashed shone gloriously

His sorrow and anger cast from the thundering miles

Her life celebrated like a goddess in this fortress

His life miserably fighting for freedom

Titans wildly fighting and dying for her love

Fame imprisoned her soul, corrupting her life to the final end

Her life complexly evolved in this anxious domain

Her voice starts to fade, while her tears fall.

The poison of barbiturate now starting to conquer her fragile body

Still the flash back of memories keeps her wake

Her heart is always for Jimi

Remembering him, her precious moments with this loving soldier.

Fame is completely lost in the world of real love

More reminiscing until her heart stops

Now the heavy rain starts to pours in the empire of dreams

The great day of mourning, losing a precious star in Hollywood

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely tribute to Norma Jean:
Needs some revision though
and worth it!
She unbolts her senses, her visions become hazy.
The feisty beat of her heart unchanged
She gasps, as her dark hour comes near.
She remembers the past, how complex it was
Tears wither in her solitary eyes
Her mother lost her mind in her solemn space
Her childhood life was a complete mess
A home she wished turn out to be coop
They scratched the shallow of her universe
She was bushed and gloomy
Until the day she found love
A real love, worth fighting for.
They both enjoyed the sweetness of milk and honey
But war separated these two loving hearts
Painted sorrows every night and day
Her lonely heart longing for him from a distance
Days, months and years had passed with a broken dream
The time had come, her stars unleashed shone gloriously
His sorrow and anger cast from the thundering miles
Her life celebrated likes a goddess in this fortress
His life miserably fighting for freedom
Titans wildly fighting and dying for her love
Fame imprisoned her soul, corrupting her life to the final end
Her life complexly evolved in this anxious domain
Her voice starts to fade, while her tears fall.
The poison of barbiturate now starting to conquer her fragile body
Still the flash back of memories keeps her wake
Her heart will always for Jimi
Remembering him, her precious moments with this loving soldier.
Fame is completely lost in the world of real love
More reminiscing until her heart stops
Now the heavy rain starts to pours in the empire of dreams
The great day of mourning, losing a precious star in Hollywood

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. John, which part you think need revision? Thanks for your honest reading.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Check out my rewrite. I just went through and tried to sort out tenses and expression but the original was powerful and beautiful.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:)Thanks Mr. John appreciate it much.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow thanks :) it makes sense now :) thanks Mr. John, sometimes my proofreading missed the point here. hehehe :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

But the sentiment you display is fantastic!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again Mr. John sometimes I am really struggling in english but I will try my best to be good. I am just new here I think I am one month already. I think I can still develop my skills :) with the support of people like you. I really appreciate it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No you are a very good writer Marc. I love what you produce and respect you for trying it in English! The title on reflection may be better as 'The Goddess of Titans and The Soldier'

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Cool I love it Mr. John thanks a lot :)

[SM Davis]

She was a brave and tormented soul. She was so desperately and solelessly exploited. One of the most brilliant business minds of her day that had been wasted on the soleless minds of men who only saw her as a sex symbol. You have beautifully captured a trecherous moment in time.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am just writing for a month and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank you, I love you all.

[francis]

Amazing to see how stars rise and all of a sudden they disappear.

[Mike Emil]

many stars and artists have been lost
you take from them what you can
make that important and remember them with brandy and song

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol you make me smile always :) thanks a lot for dropping.

[Eddie Phillips]

Great piece my friend. I liked the way you constructed this.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother glad you like it :)

[Gerald Parker]

The strength of this poem is what you have done to convey the fragility of this woman. I am reminder of how the world reacted on hearing the news of Princess Diana's death.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Gerald for your time reading my work, Yeah I am 100% agree with your words, they both special lady that will always in our heart.

[Gerald Parker]

Yep.

[Pete Langley]

It`s fascinating to me how, as a society, we elevate individuals to the rank of deities, based on a fantasy of an image we attribute - which may have no relation to actuality.
We desperately need our heroes and heroines, don`t we? We bestow love unlimited - adoration - on this Idol of our imagination as if she was our own personal love fixation. This poem is affecting as a demonstration of that adoration - of that empathy for Norma Jean`s confusion and desparation, Marc. Please take notice of John`s appraisal because it willl raise your piece to a major poem. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Pette :) I wish I could create a major poem all the time, but my skilss in english really holds me back :) anyway I am trying all the time. I am very thankful to have all of you supporting me all the time. Thanks a lot for the valubale words you shared.

[Pete Langley]

We none of us can produce a "major poem" very often at all, Marc! (and this sentance was very bad English!) The neucleus of magic that transforms a good poem to excellence cannot be manufactured - it just happens sometimes almost without our knowing. Keep writing, my friend. You`re doing OK. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Anyway thanks a lot for the help Mr. Pette, glad you are always here. :)

[icelandicblue]

An epic life and epic love and finally an epic loss. It all happened against the backdrop of a false fairyland. Nicely done Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ice lovely riview :) I treasure it. Thanks a lot.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

"Her lonely heart loving him from a distance"--so sad. I've always been enthralled by the story of Norma Jean/Marylin. Reminds me of the Elton John song, which always makes me cry. I love the ending, "More reminiscing until her heart stops"--poignant image.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks girl, what a lovely review from you, I value your words always. thanks a lot.

[AYVID N]

An excellent poetic tribute to the great star.

This poem was all about the anguish, loneliness and depression that is part and parcel of fame.

I found this poem just awesome in it's capturing the essence of the subject and in conveying the sadness behind the glitter and glamour!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Divya I appreciate your review thanks a lot :)

[AYVID N]

welcome Marc. This poem is outstanding.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) thank you