The Last Escape

 

 

 

His sinful soul drifts in the ocean of sinister

The mad dog strikes chaos

The callous legion spites nightmare.

He dedicated his life diminishing the feeble

His dark logic booms to his vicious goal

The unwanted walks into the abyss

Slowly vanquishing the entire race

The time has come his power began to end

The felonious slayer fled with his queen

He bolted out from the realm of his mystic cosmos

Hiding in the bunker of indefinite mode

She stood with his ethereal world

Blindly embracing the aberrant thought

She escaped the world with his love

Red army chasing the pair

The monster is hiding inside the bunker

Cyanide gives her the promise of love

Bullet embedded in his dome

In his last minute he crawled to death

In her last minute she cried

She ended with a real love

While he ended in hell

Author's Note

Reviews

[Pete Langley]

I understand the human need for a hell...... where we need to be satisfied that the wicked of this world will languish in an eternal torment of suffering commensurate with their earthly deeds, but I cannot subscribe to it. My personal take on this is that these individuals are the extreme manifestation of a trait in human character which is inherent. There is a paradox in humankind which has occupied anthropologists and philosophers since time immemorial . p.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I couldn't agree more, your review is excellent!

[Jack...]

For whence the bunker falls and bells shall ring the halls. Very cool Marc. I like the way you laid this out. It told a story in a deceptive but brilliant way.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jack, I value your words as precious, you are always my inspiration :)

[Singing Bird]

This is very cleverly put together Marc and you have done your homework too. It's definatley about the two individuals I had in mind. You seem to have a very educated view on how you write your poetry at times....whereas I am guilty of writing from the heart or experientially from life's trials. My take on the world nowadays is that one must have shadow to be able to perceive light hence a balance.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Couldn't agree more, love your review thanks a lot my friend for your time reading my work.

[gombeggar]

caps in yer whole title...is this about hitler and eva braun?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Wow, this is some hard core imagery packed into fairly small and tight little poem. I rather liked the darkness and matter of fact quality of this one. You've done some research and it shows, which tells me that you are a serious writer. Some amazing lines in this one. Well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Girl, your words is always an inspiration, :) thanks a lot for reading my work.

[blueholmes]

owoww!! so intense! :) love everything in it. the push and pull of feelings, the tragic, the cohesion of scenarios , your writes are all great!! :) this could be the poem epilogue for all those love that ends up tragically. can make a sequel of romeo and juliet, crisostomo ibarra and maria clara at that. haha :)) GREAT write always :))

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you so much Blue love how you review my poem, I value it deeply from my heart. :) it Volt in my passion to make more good stuff.

[blueholmes]

owie!! you have the spirit :) i learned a lot from all your works!! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks :) lol keep writing, I am checking your work it seems you dont have a new one :)

[blueholmes]

yeah, i'm lazy to do so (hehe, somebody slap me pls..i know that's not the attitude of a REAl writer) and i'm no good when i'm lazy,really..so i'll just read some other works here to keep myself motivated.. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol Keep reading :)

[blueholmes]

i will.till my very eyes shot me down hahaha :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes :) but thats the best thing to do, I also do that from time to time reading woks of others.

[blueholmes]

:)) yeah, a little while later,i'm planning to write something bout my father but i lost my notes :) hehe maybe i'll write about death instead.. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

That's good :)

[blueholmes]

i'll try :))

[Mike Emil]

like this
got some real grit to it

[Mike Emil]

and the pic reminds me of an apartment i used to stay at

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) really that is sounds cool mike :) thanks for the review :) I value it big time.

[Frieda P]

Great piece or work here Marc...hell would certainly be too easy, maybe suffer a million times over what he inflicted, I'm pretty sure that was worse than hell....

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie, I also think like that but i need to go out in the office my work is finish that is why he ended short hehheh :) Thanks for your time reading my friend :)

[Gerald Parker]

It might be comforting for you and others to state 'he ended in hell' but sadly, mon ami, this is no more than a leap of faith.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah I agree Mr. Gerald :)

[Gerald Parker]

Sure?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes my friend

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Je le pense.

[Gerald Parker]

Tres bien

[Ohhhwillow]

You have an excellent idea of which words to use - it is clear you read a lot, or perhaps just have a great sense of what is enticing to the reader. I think you have some great potential. And this is both seeping in romanticism and passion for writing. However, I feel your end-stopping structure deprives this piece of the flow it is capable of. Perhaps leading some lines next will not be a detriment to the trauma you are trying to convey. Lovely write though

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi Willow thanks for the reads, your review is always an inspiration. I was not able to explore it more since i need to go out from my work,
It's 5 Pm already that is why I post immediately. But I am thinking to explore more maybe in part 2 :) thanks again.