The Code of Cleopatra

First light comes with grandeur promise

Eastern wind blows with fragrance of lily

                      Be stupor to the compelling sounds of the river Nile

Relish the softness of my Egyptian silk

Your regal mightiness covers my sinuous bare body

Invades my senses with your tempest aroma

                     Forest green soft fabric covering your sword

I want to lie down with you to savor the sweetness of  honey

                 Soak deeply your soul into the ceaseless milk

Conquer my abode, seize my spirit.

     

Lock with mine your universe that is eternally embedded in my core

Author's Note

Reviews

[SM Davis]

This is very interesting. I don't think I've ever seen stupor used as an adjective (rather than a noun). The various fonts and colors are not clearly resonated here and left me a bit confused. The imagery is impeccable. The last line is GENIUS!!! WEll done.

[Junert]

Wow. The title attracts and the poem itself is just amazing.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks my sister :) your words always an inspiration to me :)

[Jem Sagcal]

I honestly got surprised when the music started playing. Hahahaha.

This piece was absolutely amazing, and it did take me back to such a History. You definitely have a wide sense of imagery, Sir. Nice write.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) thanks Jem, you are always as inspiration to me, your honest review inspire me to create more good stuff thanks a lot for reading.

[Jem Sagcal]

Aw, no problem! Do keep writing, as I enjoy reading!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) thanks again

[Pete Langley]

Your depiction is exotic and sensual and the whole makes a good poem, Marc. Technically, " Invade..." should be "Invades..." and "...covering" should be "...covers" .
Hope this helps. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Pete I really admired your sincere review, thanks for the support.

[Pax]

seems like you have captured Cleopatra's life in beautiful imagery... you have some known knowledge about her... wala ako masyadong alam diyan..lol... but i really like the way you presented this and the imagery is quite stunning... great work kabayan...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) Thanks Pax, your words always and inspiration.

[Pax]

opts daming typo(now fixed)... and your most welcome!

[khalid]

as a person related to this. i liked how you have penned this.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother, :) I appreciate your words, it is a big thing for me that you like it.

[Trigorin]

You have a good concept here, and I think you've managed to catch the image you were going for very well. I personally don't really like some of the language you've used here, but it's very obvious that it's for a purpose. Well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tri, you always here to guide me :) thanks a lot.

[Strawberry]

You've captured a beautiful image in this poem, as well as evoking some really powerful emotions.

What do you mean by lock your universe?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi straw :) this line has adult material meaning and also could be interpreted as “controlling her man’s life and kept him forever in her heart.” thanks for your time reading my work. your words is always an inspiration to me.

[Strawberry]

Ah, that makes sense and clears the confusion. Nice work!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Straw :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

I wouldn't dare to change a thing...I quite like the type changes I think they DO add something...Some outstanding lines to a great poem

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Dr. Wood :) thank you for your time reading my work.

[gombeggar]

this doesn't need all the change of type and color...let the words speak for themselves...although the pic is good and relevant, me thinks

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for the review, changing text color is just a format and stye, but I appreciate your thought.

[AYVID N]

Wow! So poetic Marc. I just loved it. You did justice to the great Egyptian beauty so well here.

"Eastern wind blows with fragrance of lily
Stupor to the compelling sounds of the river Nile"

- I just loved these lines take took me to the misty ancient past.

Keep it up!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Divya :) your words is a big thing to me, glad you like it :) thanks again!