Box Rain Dark

The Saga of my undying love.

Spirit, light, shade and dark

I am mysteriously in love with you

 

                         The sun, the moon and the stars

                         I pray to the heaven above that you are the one

 

Hands, kisses, and hugs.

I wish tomorrow will come with promises of real love

 

Rainbow, jewel stone, and fire

Passionate love we both enjoy and cherish

 

Storms, big waves and earthquakes

I’m wondering if we could build a life together

 

                            Space, empty room and box

                            Now my life has no direction

 

Clouds, rain and tears

Now I have lost you

 

Box…Rain…Dark Goodbye my love

Author's Note

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

I love what you did with this poem. Nature just naturally calls out to me in ways that nothing else can. Whether it be in connection to spiritual things or love, nature feels honest. Great title. Each three word choices has me stopping to receive from it.

[quinfinn]

this is gorgeous. it speaks of disconnected connections which are both intangible and solid. every line a mild contradiction of emotions and passion. yet, it is when one reads between the lines here that they fully understand and feel this write, embrace it and consume it. very nicely done!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Quin, :) love your insights on this piece.

[Rogue]

This feels disconnected and completely connected at the same time. A wonderful juxtaposition to experience while reading actually. We all know the emotions and sentiments experienced here.. Yet everything else about this piece is unique.
Really great work! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Rouge :) happy you came and made this lovely review.

[Ees]

Oh, I like this. I enjoyed the disjointed feeling that speaks of remembering expirences. It is well written and easy to read and follow which I consider great qualities in poetry. I also love the darkness included. It gives it a nice edge.
Great job!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ees, I really appreciate your precious time, reading my work.

[Ees]

No problem!

[Izzy-01]

thats an interesting way of potraying love.....i liked it

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks a lot Izzy :)

[Tate Morgan]

Now that is beautifully done the music transcends this piece lifting it to new heights.Simply put Eloquent very eloquent!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tate :) I am glad you like this. thanks for your time reading my work.

[Veronica Chandler]

This is such a lovely and well written piece, you have skillfully written such a beautiful poem. An encapsulation of the depth and breadth and birth and death of a big mystery in life, love. I also enjoyed the way you treated the appearance of the text. A well done and sensitive write.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi Roni thanks for your review, I really appriciate your time reading my work. I will visit your work soon. Thanks for adding me as your friend, I am glad you like this piece,this is really a sad piece I wrote during my downtime :) but I am happy I get over from this experienced. Cheers!

[Em]

I love this. very well written.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Em :) glad you like and thanks for your time reading my work.

[Em]

Youre welcome

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:)

[Dakshta]

Another beautiful write :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you my friend :) glad you like it :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am just writing for a month and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank you, I love you all.

[Relic]

Wow, you're a very powerful writer. This is very well written and takes us through a happy life to one of sorrow. Great stuff.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Relic but I am struggling with my grammar sometimes I am glad you like it :)

[Relic]

I do, and It's okay, I struggle with punctuation a lot.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks :) English is not my first language, but I am very thankful for all good writers who always there correcting i made some mistakes :) I think thats the process I am only 1 month writing.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

If I made a mistake I mean :)

[Relic]

You do very well for only one month. Good luck to you.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks my friend :) good luck to you too :)