New York Lovers

This perfect world of mine

The one that you treasure and adore

The place you discover and lost your universe

Love hearing your sweet voice when I flex my muscles

It is all joy, joy that in my heart will stay

This face that you will love forever

My time that you always wanted

I gave my all, all that I have.

 

I forget to love myself

I neglect the calls for change

I continue wondering, giving my best.

I forget to breathe for my soul

Then the moment has comes

I’ve lost you; I’ve lost myself and everything.

Lost, completely lost, could somebody help me?

I want you; I want you to be here badly.

 

Now I am searching for you

Those places we used to go

Only the shadows remain

As I am walking, walking in the pouring rain.

In every step, every breath, every glimpse.

You are there, you are my world

I wish the rain would turn into fire

So that my body will feel again your warm embrace

Your lips that kissed me torridly

Hear my plea, please come back to me.

I am crazy, I don’t care, I don’t mind.

It is a sin, but this is my life.

You are my life

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"It is a sin, but this is my life.
You are my life"
The title brought me in and the story in the poem held me to the last word. Some people can make us love forever with a simple touch and whispered in the night. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Coyote, :) I appreciate it big time :) thanks for the review.

[Frieda P]

Since I've already given you my thoughts on this one, it's probably redundant to say again, but I so enjoyed this one...makes me think of a New York minute, where everything changes so quickly. I so love this line...

''I wish the rain would turn into fire"

Nicely pen'd....great read.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie, :) I really appreciate your support. thanks a lot. Also, thanks for the great review.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow Marc a lovely sad piece of 'self' disclosure. Someone once arogant who has been tamed. Who because of past learning did not appreciate what they had till they lost it and awoke to reality. Good flow, great pathos!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks John, I appreciate your review big time :) got to sleep now it is 3 AM here.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sleep sound Marc I' m off to bed too as it is 00:30

[Jack...]

Quite lovely but it feels a little rushed to me, but then again maybe that is how it is supposed to feel. The theme is perfect.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jack :) yeah I feel also the same thing, it is a rush actually its 3 am now in the middle east. I will to work out some twist tomorrow to make it more engaging. :) Thanks for your time reading my work.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I will work out some twist tomorrow to make it more engaging. :) Thanks for your time reading my work. (sorry for the typo)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like a lot of this...but have trouble with tenses..the constant switching makes it hard to know if the person is out of the speaker's life eternally or just temporarily..

there are strong words of love here...but i got a bit confused...needs a bit of clarity with tense.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jacob I will re-read my work tomorrow :) I appreciate your review.

[Trigorin]

You have a good concept here, but I think the tone comes across as a little too devoted. There's a lot of poetry out there which looks almost exactly like this, with that same tone, and I honestly don't see anything here that's really fresh or new. This is well-written, but I feel like there ought to be something else, some sort of bite or hook to keep the reader engaged.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks, I will consider your review Trigorin and I treasure it :) Thanks for your time reading my work.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I want an honest review :) you are free to criticize my work. Thanks