The love of Aphrodite

A woman has always weakness even her name is Aphrodite.

 

Wind, wind blows touching my skin.

Rain, rain drops, I am standing here against the rain.

 

The thunder strikes, my heart beats electrified.

This time of my life, I don’t want to hide.

 

Can you hear me? My voice slows down like it flows in the thin air.

I am here suffering in the dark, still in the realm of fear.

 

I am waiting for you to come and save me

I am longing for your love please hear my plea

 

The light would be a dream I am waiting for

Please come and hold my body, take me more.

 

Kiss; kiss me as we forget the time of sin

In this life we are all living in the stratum of pain.

 

As long as I hold you now, I will not be afraid.

As long as you are here, my heart will not bleed.

 

Please stay with me, stay even it is an indulgence.

Cover me with your soul, touch my body without a blench.

 

I will go out now from the dark, I will go with you.

The moment has come this love is true

 

I will turn my back on the life I had before

All I have now, I am happy, I can’t ask for more.

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

I enjoyed this journey of finding ones self through finding love
it seems that the words should at first look for what they want to love
I almost feel like anyone could have pulled out of the dark but no you were waiting in the dark going over a true love checklist...life before again but now with love
cover me with your soul-I just like that image so much it is lovely
thank you for sharing

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Holly :) I am happy to hear your precious thought and good review.

[icelandicblue]

This is very prayer like in its cadence. To love is to be able to forget your pain, even if just temporarily.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ice, thank you for your time reading my work and precious review. :)

[char]

Aphrodite, the Goddess of Love. I always saw her as a manipulative type of person, but it seems she is just a woman. If that makes sense. Nice job, Villaflor.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ana, I just explore the weakness of Aphrodite, because I believe despite of the manipulative features of her, still I believe there is some weakness in her part.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for the review and your time reading my work.

[char]

You are very welcome :)

[JR Darewood]

I like the idea of love as comfort-- it's really powerful.
my favorite part is definitely the last two lines, turning your back on the life you had before because you are happy now and cant ask for more. I felt warm and comforted just reading it!!!!

I caught some grammatical stuff tho:

"come and holds my body" should be "come and hold my body"
"as long as you here" should be "as long as you are here"
also i'm not sure about this one, but is blench a verb? I know flinch can be both, but I'm not sure about blench. if it's a noun, you might wanna say without *a* blench
Maybe "I will turn my back for the life I have before" could be "I will turn my back on the life I had before"

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi thanks a lot for the honest review, just bear with my english sometimes my proofreading didn't hit it :) anyway thank you very much for your precious review, I really appreciate an honest review. Thanks a lot.

[JR Darewood]

nice poem man. You made me think maybe i should try dating again!!!
My english is the same... I'm always finding mistakes I missed every time i re-read my own stuff I wrote. Anything I can do to help.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks a lot man :) I appreciate it. Good luck for your dating :)

[JR Darewood]

hahahaha, i need it!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) I am with you bro. :) keep the fire burning! cheers!

[Baby Ricochet]

Sorry bro I don't get going after Aphrodite out of this at all. Having been with a few Aphrodite types I can tell you women like her can and will drive a man out of his mind and it isn't always in a good way. I just didn't get any passion here at all.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

We can never tell each of the person has weakness and I am considering the weakness of Aphrodite. I am referring to the literal woman. :) thanks for reading bro.

[Ohhhwillow]

This flows melodically, I can clearly envision these as lyrics to a heartfelt song. Gentle, you caress each word before laying it down on the page, for the whole world to see. I love this

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Willow :) glad you like this piece. Thank you very much for your time reading my work. Thanks for the review.

[Trigorin]

Not bad. I think you might as well just format this the same throughout, as you don't really need the italics and different font colors, but the content is very accessible and relatable, which is always a plus. Well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Trigorin :) I would consider your suggestion. Thanks for the good review.

[AYVID N]

If we have love, could we ask for more..? The wind, the thundering skies, the light..all conspire to bring to fruition, that everlasting kiss.

A superb rendition on love Marc. Keep penning!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Divya :) happy reading your review. Thanks a lot.

[AYVID N]

Welcome Marc! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Positive and strong description in the poem. I like the desire and the flow of thoughts. I like the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Coyote, I really appreciate your positive review. I am happy reading those appreciation.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a kiss is really special...because a good kiss can take us away from everything else..we get lost in the bliss...in the passion...i like the way this is two poems within one.

nicely done.

and being happy is about all we can ask for.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Well said Mr. Jacob, thanks a lot for the review and I admired your view with this kind of love affair.