And so you now address what seems to me a metaphor for, or if not that, a way of expressing the real in your love life:
The endless drag, the sensual spin, the forbidden fruit of the illicit relationship with either the married or the simply dedicated; the conjoined;
The thrill of the 'sin' of getting away with it measured by the critique and judgement, the father, morality, your own included; and
The real pain you face, or your persona, your protagonist here does.
Not easy teritory for the faint of heart nor for those who have never been there. Educational perhaps but cerainly not titillating as you express it, for those who haven't.
It still remains here in your piece the realm of the broken hearted and not the charlatan, the Don Juan, the Don Giovanni.
I fear I have been there. I have been perhaps too many places in my life, in just the one lifetime.
Too many permitted and impermissible fruits.
But that leaves me both shipwrecked and the wiser from it.
We learn or we die.
I prefer not suicide by absence of learning.
It happens. It happened to me.
You express the heartache and a genuine one well.
You teach me. You relate to me.
An accomplished piece.
But in the real world outside the meandering soul searching of the writer, let's move on to fresher and brighter pastures new.
A world where the word illicit does not stem from the Latin 'illicitus' 'forbiden' with the quaint old Norse 'ill' unwell as a kicker, into the brighter world of real love where no-one gets hurt.
I admire your honesty.
If there is anythging I like to see in most of what I read it is that and you do it in spades here.
With my kindest regards as ever
James
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you James, I couldn't agree more :) it is the best and honest review I ever have. Cheers!
I am just writing for a month and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank you, I love you all.
Love the first two lines...absolutely stunning. There are many types of love, and each has its own genuine and subtle gifts. I love this exploration. Nicely done.
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11 Years Ago
Thanks Girl Friday :) I appreciate your good review :)
Amazing, the old world feel to this was amazing. The texture of this piece is subtle and soft yet bright and vibrant in color and nature. You have a special quality to your writing which appeals to many. very nice.
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11 Years Ago
Thanks Mr. Jack, I appreciate your review always as you are one of the greatest and I am always fol.. read moreThanks Mr. Jack, I appreciate your review always as you are one of the greatest and I am always follow your works. Thanks a lot :)
Thanks I check the soundtrack its heavenly can't find the words to express it, I almost cried :) tha.. read moreThanks I check the soundtrack its heavenly can't find the words to express it, I almost cried :) thanks for sharing Mariam.
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