My Perfect Green Day

A baby born in this world...he grow up, live and enjoy life, gets old and die.

 

When the dark skies faded in dawn, whilst the sun rising

The fowl start singing and wavering

 

The green and sumptuous grass glistening with mist 

A new day comes propitious with zest

 

Rivers flow endlessly like a mellifluous milk pour

Mountains and hills, landscape captivates the splendor.

 

Flower's fragrance emanates artlessly in thin air

Bees pollinate flowers in a vastly blare

 

This grandeur forever stays in our realm

A precious gift lies forever in our dream

 

As the sun dwindles in the western sky

Its golden rays beautifully beam the butterflies

 

 

My perfect green day has gone blessedly,

Oh God thank you, I spent it to the fullest completely

Reviews

[AYVID N]

This lovely poem somehow reminded me of homecoming. Such unadulterated and pure beauty of nature has to be home.

"Rivers flow endlessly like a mellifluous milk pour
Mountains and hills, landscape captivates the splendor.
Flower's fragrance emanates artlessly in thin air
Bees pollinate flowers in a vastly blare"

-Splendidly described...you speak from your soul here.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Divya :) I can picture out your homeland with this words hehe I love India specially Kashmir.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the perfect green day. I need to find a place like this. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jack...]

Marc, I am too sure about this one, it rhymes and then it doesn't which is ok if it follows a pattern, but it doesn't. The themes is good and there are some very good lines, but the flow seems jagged to me. Just my opinion.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. Jack for your review, I will consider your suggestion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a couple spots need editing...but what a beautiful piece on life...and its cycle...

the sun rises and greets us into life...and then as it falls at dusk, waves good-bye to us...

really nice poem

jacob

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Jacob :) can you tell which part of it? :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"flower's fragrance"

"a precious gift lies forever in our dream" "its golden rays beautifully beam..."

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you Mr. Jacob, now I know lol :) thanks again.

[SimpleMind]

Great stuff!!! I almost forgot that simple things like this were the most amazing....Showing how to be satisfied and thankful is perfectly conveyed in words! 'Tis a very wonderful poem :) Keep it up!!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for the review :) I appreciate it!