Hold my hands

I have this feeling to write something about those people who tried to re-create the broken pieces, those families who experience ups and down. I wish this poem will inspire them.

I am longing for every breath of your soul
I never mind, if they call me a fool

In every single glance of your eyes
I have a weak heart, and sometimes blinded in tolerating your lies

I'm pushing my luck to get your love
I stay at night praying to the heaven above

That when I wake up in the morning you're still there
It doesn't matter if you still care

What I really wanted you stay with me
To see you, talking with our kids everyday

Until the last teardrop falls from eyes
Until the moment that I can no longer rise

My brain kept telling me, I love you
My heart felt all pain and happiness that we been through

I could no longer hear you, your voice that I really missed
My vision fades like I am in the complete darkness 

I am fearless thinking of you as my only one
Please hold my hands until my last breath is gone

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is touching and painful...i would lose the last line...the poem speaks for itself without that..

a couple spots need grammatical shakeup..."when i wake up in the morning you're still there"

"teardrops fall" "vision gets faded"

but a really strong piece from the heart.


jacob

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Jacob :) your review is very helpful.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem of love. When heart and mind find something good. No stopping the desire for the sweet woman. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks a lot bro. thank you for your time reading my work :)

[AYVID N]

This is very sad. When we just clutch on to straws, hoping...longing. Dying along with the death of our love.

Yet there is hope as I see it here:
"I am fearless thinking of you as my only one

Please hold my hands until my last breath is gone" - These lines are all about faith and preseverance. It was great to read.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Divya I really appreciate your time reading my work.

[AYVID N]

You are welcome and looking forward to read more of your writing soon.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks you too I am rooting for your work. Cheers to all of us!

[SimpleMind]

I can see the story... probably one of the common family problem... the thing is, the character here is not giving up despite the situation. The very thing that's lacking in real life. Thanks for sharing :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah it's really true, usually for some typical Filipino Family, the mother won't give up until her last breath. She's always tryin her best to save the family not to be ruin. Thanks again for the review, I really appreciate it.

[SimpleMind]

Haha that makes me proud :) I'm a filipina....
And it's the sad part, it's always the woman who will exert the effort.. despite all the **** and all..if you know what i mean

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah :) I always have a high respect for those mothers who fight for, to protect the family.

[SimpleMind]

I couldn't agree more :)

[Nick.B]

This is very dark and raw, I like your style, shows the desperation and how the regret of a huge loss...great job

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks NIck :)